writing task 2

[wajidnaeem]

When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

You should write at least 250 words.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
The use of modern days technology is ever increasing and many countries across the globe are making use of new inventions to keep them connected with the outside world.Nowadays,it can often seen that,when a nation makes progress and adopt new innovations most of its old ways of life deteriorates and it becomes meaningless to follow and keep them in check.I completely agree to this statement.Let's discuss this in detail below.

Firstly,it is the sole right of every civilization to adopt and implement modern days technology because it can help and boost the economy of local businesses as well as it also helps to improve the living standards of general population.For instance,development in China only became possible when the Chinese people acquired the new means of technology and left their outdated skills and traditional ways of life style.This shows that,adopting latest machinery and equipments can lead a country on the path of success.Thus,every nation should install and make use latest technology to be able to compete with the modern world.

Secondly,advancements of a society can bring many job opportunities for the local residents which wont be possible by sticking to the obsolete ways of life style.For example,job opportunities became highly available in Japan ,in all industries during the era,when the Japanese people welcomed the latest technology in their country.It proved beneficial towards the local people and unemployment rate fell in that country over the period of time.Therefore,it is concluded that people in many parts of the world are happy to adopt up to date inventions as it improved their life style in many ways.

To summarize,acquiring present day scientific knowledge is providing people with better living standards as well as it is also contributing towards the success of a country.It is supported that traditional ways of life styles should be avoided once a country develops its technology as it proves crucial to the development of societies and provide population with quality life.

word count =321 , please grade this essay out of 9 bands and any feed back and suggestions would be much appreciated .

[David.IELTS.Examiner]

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[wajidnaeem]

hi i have reposted the essay with the title , can you have a look at it and grade it out of 9 bands .and any suggestions and advice would be really appreciated .thanks