Please kindly assess my writing task 2 - THANKS

[jayani]

Writing Task 2 -
It is inevitable that as technology develops so traditional cultures must be lost.Technology and tradition are incompatible - you cannot have both together.

To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

It is often viewed by some that, conventional norms ought to get disappear with the proliferation of technology.This essay disagrees with this statement and will analyze to what extent compatibility of new inventions and conventional uses are applicable to a certain phenomenon , followed up with a reasoned conclusion.

Telecommunication systems have been developing throughout the past few decades while some people still tend to use traditional posts and mails.For example according to The Wall Street Journal, in 2015, 97% of the multinational companies in France preferred to use postage to deliver their physical confidential documents.This emphasizes the view that even though the technologies such as fax and email are available, the notion of conventional courier service is still un avoidable, especially in certain circumstances.

Furthermore, in the recent past, technology has contributed to boost the sophistication of teaching practices.To reinforce young students, most of the institutes has introduced affordable online distance learning courses.However, for instance, The Contemporary Academic Institute of London recently carried out a survey and published that, in 2010 majority of local accountancy students in London were interested to espouse courses carried out on university premises on weekends.In fact, this highlights the idea that with the existence of highly advanced online learning techniques, students still find it more effective to grasp class room lectures.

In conclusion, the essay supports the notion that development of technology cannot supersede conventional practices at certain scenarios.Moreover, situations like distribution of confidential documents and also to undertake studies on university premises are still in high demand and predominant choice of people.It is recommended that if people could be more flexible towards understanding the applicability of new technologies and traditional norms based on their individual need.

[David.IELTS.Examiner]

Hello!

I have to say that this is very strange essay. When people mention 'traditional culture', your first thought is the postal service?!

Traditional Chinese culture - Lunar New Year or the postal service? Traditional French culture - making cheese and wine or the postal service?

The Contemporary Academic Institute of London does not exist.

I just don't think that this answers the question.

All the best,
David