kindly assess my writing task 1

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n0m4n
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kindly assess my writing task 1

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The graphs illustrate information about amount of fuel, food, manufactured goods, and total exports in a country, over a five-year period between 2000 and 2005.

Overall, what stands out from graph is that total exports rose considerably over the period in question. Manufactured goods exports went up slightly, while fuel exports fell significantly, and food exports remained stable over the period.

Looking at details, as regards total value of exports, it started at $300000 million in 2000, and then there was a gradual decrease to $250000 million until 2002. After that exports grew significantly to $350000 million in 2003. What followed this was a period of gradual increase, reaching approximately $225000 million in 2005. Looking at manufactured goods exports, they started at about $17000 million in 2000 and risen modestly to around $23000 million in 2001 and then leveled off until 2002. Having fallen gradually to just under $20000 million in 2003, exports then went up steadily and ended at approximately $22000 million in 2005.

In contrast, there were $45000 million fuel exports in 2000, but this value dropped considerably to just under $30000 million over next two years and then followed by a steady decline, ending at $20000 million in 2005. Regarding food exports, they started at $3000 million in 2000 and then dipped slightly in 2001 but again recovered to year 2000 value in 2002 and maintained this value until 2005.
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Re: kindly assess my writing task 1

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The first diagram is incorrectly labelled. Anyway, you have done a great job!
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The first diagram should be labeled as " the total value of exports" is that it?
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n0m4n wrote:The graphs illustrate information about the amount of fuel, food, manufactured goods, and total exports in a country, over a five-year period between 2000 and 2005.

Overall, what stands out from the graph is that total exports rose considerably over the period in question. Manufactured goods exports increased slightly, while fuel exports fell significantly, and food exports remained stable over the period.

Looking at details, as regards the total value of exports, it started at $300,000 million in 2000, and then there was a gradual decrease to $250,000 million by 2002. After that, exports grew significantly to $350,000 million in 2003. What followed this was a period of gradual increase, reaching approximately $425,000 million in 2005. Looking at manufactured goods exports, they started at about $17,000 million in 2000 and rose modestly to around $23,000 million in 2001 and then leveled off around 2002. Having fallen gradually to just under $20,000 million in 2003, exports then went up steadily and ended at approximately $22,000 million in 2005.

In contrast, there were $45,000 million fuel exports in 2000, but this value dropped considerably to just under $30,000 million over the next two years and then experienced a steady decline, ending at $20,000 million in 2005. Regarding food exports, they started at $3,000 million in 2000 and then dipped slightly in 2001 but again recovered in 2002 and maintained this value until 2005.
A quick note on numbers:
1,000,000 = one million
1,000,000,000 = one billion
Therefore, with these graphs, 200000 million dollars = 200,000,000,000 = two hundred billion dollars
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