please evaluate my essay
Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2014 6:30 am
please evaluate my essay. I'm mimicking Ryan's structure, and my target is band 7. Thanks
Some people think cars should be banned in city centers, especially in large cities. Do you agree or disagree?
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In today’s world, the number of motor vehicles is swelling rapidly, and this trend causes numerous adverse impacts on centers of large cities. It is therefore agreed that cars should be forbidden in downtowns. This will be proven by looking at how this practice helps benefit citizens’ lifestyle and protect environment.
Firstly, banning cars in large city center provides dweller with more green spaces and improves citizens’ living standard. For example, Yangzhou government implemented a strict policy to prohibit private cars to enter the center of the city, and reconstructed some car parks accordingly to parks and pedestrian walkways. This action not only creates more space for citizens for recreation, but also makes it easier and more convenient for people to live in the city. As this example shows, it is clear that the option that cars should be banned in city centers is a good idea.
In addition to the above, restricting vehicles in big city centers encourages people to use public transportation, which reduces the air pollution. For instance, Shandong Communication Authority applied an actionable strategy recently that not allowed cars in the city center during rush hours. Because of this, most people choose metro or bus for commuting and consequently the air quality in this city has been improved greatly. Thus, this example makes it clear that vehicles in downtowns should be inhibited.
Following this look, it is concluded that disallowing motorized vehicles to enter city centers should be supported. It is hoped that this arrangement will be forfeited and widely accepted into the foreseeable future.
Some people think cars should be banned in city centers, especially in large cities. Do you agree or disagree?
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In today’s world, the number of motor vehicles is swelling rapidly, and this trend causes numerous adverse impacts on centers of large cities. It is therefore agreed that cars should be forbidden in downtowns. This will be proven by looking at how this practice helps benefit citizens’ lifestyle and protect environment.
Firstly, banning cars in large city center provides dweller with more green spaces and improves citizens’ living standard. For example, Yangzhou government implemented a strict policy to prohibit private cars to enter the center of the city, and reconstructed some car parks accordingly to parks and pedestrian walkways. This action not only creates more space for citizens for recreation, but also makes it easier and more convenient for people to live in the city. As this example shows, it is clear that the option that cars should be banned in city centers is a good idea.
In addition to the above, restricting vehicles in big city centers encourages people to use public transportation, which reduces the air pollution. For instance, Shandong Communication Authority applied an actionable strategy recently that not allowed cars in the city center during rush hours. Because of this, most people choose metro or bus for commuting and consequently the air quality in this city has been improved greatly. Thus, this example makes it clear that vehicles in downtowns should be inhibited.
Following this look, it is concluded that disallowing motorized vehicles to enter city centers should be supported. It is hoped that this arrangement will be forfeited and widely accepted into the foreseeable future.
