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Mahdi99 wrote:Hey Terry.
I happen to be an Academic module student, so I can't provide any constructive criticism on this because I honestly don't know how General task 1 is scored. But I think you did a great job.
Good linking devices, good grammar and good vocabulary.
The only thing (it's a very small mistake, barely noticeable) is that I feel like "Ali caught a flu" could perhaps be "Ali caught THE flu". Once again, I'm not a native speaker, and I don't know if British people say "a flu", but I do know that the Americans and Canadians say "the flu".
Just sounded a little odd to my ears, but once again, if you're sitting for General, you'll probably get an 8 or 9 in this essay. Because you have native-speaker level english
Hope that helped,
Mahdi.

terry3218 wrote:You borrowed some books from your school or college library. Unfortunately you have to go away to visit a sick relative and cannot return the books in time.
Write a letter to the library. Explain what has happened and tell them what you want to do about it.
You should write at least 150 words.
You do NOT need to write your own address.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear............

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing regarding the books that I borrowed from your library last week. Unfortunately, I will not be able to return the books in due time. Please let me take a moment to elaborate.

Yesterday, my aunt broke the news to me that my cousin is quite ill. It turns out that my cousin, Ali, caught the flu while traveling back from New Jersey, and is apparently in critical condition. Since he does not have a sibling or any immediate family with him in this country, I am going to pay him a visit to enquire about his health, and therefore, I will not be able to return the books on time.

My intention in writing this letter is to request that you waiver the fine that will be levied on me for not returning the borrowed books on time. I will be grateful to you if you consider my request.

Expecting your supportive response,
Sam