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I have my letter below.
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Dear Friends, Your feedback can help me make those errors in examination room.Please help.
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Hi saqibali,

Please type the letter out. I would be happy to give you feedback. The images you posted are difficult to read.

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Write a letter to your friend for
1. Why you could not attend his marriage

2. What was the reason?

3. How would you compensate?

Dear Friend,
I am writing this letter to apologize for not being able to attend your marriage ceremony. Please allow me to furnish reasons.
Unfortunately, the same day, I have had to submit my official proposal. The task was delegated to me a month earlier. Clearly, the proposal had much more importance to strategic goals of the company. In addition, I had given my consent to take over this proposal a week earlier than I received your marriage invitation. Although planned strictly and tightly, the work could not be finished even a day earlier than planned day.You marriage ceremony was a great tool to get-together with your family as well as my batch mates, I share with you. But unfortunately, due to aforementioned reasons, I was unable to attend your marriage ceremony.
Although there can be no substitute for such a awesome gathering but I along with my wife would like to invite you for a dinner, five days from now in town hall near your house. This will give a chance to get introduced with your wife. Please accept my invitation.
Waiting your reply,
Saqib.