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Task 1. Could someone please give me a feedback?

Posted: Thu May 21, 2015 12:55 pm
by Danibizz
The line graph presents the changes in the share price of Oukumpu companies in a five-year period, highlighting a general decline.

In 2006 the price share was in the middle of a soare, starting from a value of 13 and reaching a peak of 31 at the end of the year.
The following period was signed by a slight decrease, tackled by some climb attempts, but resulting in an overall decline, dipping to 22 at the end of 2007. The new year started with a soar and a pick of 30 was reached before the radical fall which took the share price at his lowest point of 7.
In 2009 started a slight recover peaking at 15. The successive period was signed by an erratic attitude, fluctuating between a dip of 12 and a peak of 17.
At the end of 2010 the price corresponds at EUR 13, and we can predict from the graph a slight decreasing trend for the coming period

Re: Task 1. Could someone please give me a feedback?

Posted: Thu May 21, 2015 10:02 pm
by OnlineEnglishTeacher
In 2006 the ("share price"?) price share was in the middle of ("an increase") a soare, starting from a value of 13 and reaching a peak of 31 at the end of the year.
The following period was ("notable") signed by a slight decrease, (?)tackled by some ("increases"?) climb attempts, but resulting in an overall decline, dipping to 22 at the end of 2007. The new year started with ("a rise") a soar and a pick of 30 was reached before the radical fall which took the share price ("to its") at his lowest point of 7.
In 2009 ("there") started a slight ("recovery") recover peaking at 15. The successive period ("possessed an erratic") was signed by an erratic attitude, fluctuating between a dip of 12 and a peak of 17.
At the end of 2010 the price corresponds ("to") at EUR 13, and we can predict from the graph a slight decreasing trend for the coming period(".")

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