What do you make of this essay? Target 8+

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terry3218
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What do you make of this essay? Target 8+

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Several languages die every year and English is becoming used more and more as a world language. Many people feel this is a positive trend and that a world with fewer languages promotes harmony and understanding between people. Analyze both sides of this argument and provide your opinion

Ever since the initiation of globalization, the gap between cultures is shrinking. This is evident in the way that English is becoming a lingua franca of the world and the way in which many indigenous languages are becoming extinct. Some argue that this is a positive development and it promotes harmony and accord between people, while others refute this. Both sides of this debate will be analyzed in this essay before a reasoned conclusion is drawn.

On the one hand, many believe that having a common language as a medium of instruction can remove miscommunication from human interactions. For instance, Tottenham Hotspurs Football Club recently bought several players from different countries. This turned out to be an utter failure for the club as the manager was unable to disseminate his messages to players, most of whom had different languages as their native tongues. This could have been avoided if all of the players knew a common language. Hence, it is clear why this point of view has garnered support.

On the other hand, some contend that adoption of a common language at the expense of local languages destroys the local culture and values. Take Pakistan, for example, where the affluent families encourage their children to not speak in their local languages for the fear of being perceived as old-fashioned. As a result, many teenagers from such families are completely ignorant about their native languages. Therefore, it is obvious why many people support this stance.

After pondering upon both sides of this argument, it is felt that a balance should be struck between upholding traditional languages and adopting a common language as a means of communication. It is hoped that people will continue to make efforts to wane the communication barriers amongst them.

~ 290 words
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What a great essay you have , you have given specific examples relevant to the topic and have used complex sentence structures and vocabulary words that are quite sophisticated, I wish i could make such an essay as this good. From my modest perspective, you might reach the target band score with this kind of essay that you have. :D
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terry3218 wrote:Several languages die every year and English is becoming used more and more as a world language. Many people feel this is a positive trend and that a world with fewer languages promotes harmony and understanding between people. Analyze both sides of this argument and provide your opinion

Ever since the initiation of globalization, the gap between cultures has been shrinking. This is evident in the way that English is becoming a lingua franca of the world and the way in which many indigenous languages are becoming extinct. Some argue that this is a positive development and it promotes harmony and accord between people, while others refute this. Both sides of this debate will be analyzed in this essay before a reasoned conclusion is drawn.

On the one hand, many believe that having a common language as a medium of instruction can remove miscommunication from human interactions. For instance, Tottenham Hotspurs Football Club recently bought several players from different countries. This turned out to be an utter failure for the club as the manager was unable to disseminate his messages to players, most of whom had different languages as their native tongues. This could have been avoided if all of the players knew a common language. Hence, it is clear why this point of view has garnered support.

On the other hand, some contend that adoption of a common language at the expense of local languages destroys the local culture and values. Take Pakistan, for example, where the affluent families encourage their children to not speak in their local languages for the fear of being perceived as old-fashioned. As a result, many teenagers from such families are completely ignorant of their native language. Therefore, it is obvious why many people support this stance.

After pondering both sides of this argument, it is felt that a balance should be struck between upholding traditional languages and adopting a common language as a means of communication. It is hoped that people will continue to make efforts to lower the communication barriers between them.

~ 290 words
Really well written. Great job!
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