Please evaluate my essay (targeting 7 band)
Posted: Mon May 11, 2015 7:18 pm
Students who go directly from school to university benefit less from and contribute less to their courses than those who take a job or travel in order to get more experience in 'real world' before they start higher education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.
Dr. Matthew, can you please evaluate this essay and please tell me what band can I achieve with this essay.
It’s believed that getting experience before higher education aid students to understand the courses easily and effectively as compared to the fresh students. On the other hand it’s also believed that fresh students can take more benefit due to their learning curiosity. In my point of view that there are some prerequisite qualities that helps both types of students to get more benefit from the university courses. In the coming lines, I will discuss the two point of views along with prerequisite qualities that help both type of students in studies and will also give example from my personal experience.
Firstly, Industry experienced student can get more benefit only on their specialized subject as higher education degree consist of several specialized subjects. For example in Computer Science there are several sub-disciplines like programming, databases, and networking. On the other hand, fresh students have more curiosity than experienced fellow. This is because experienced student focus only on their specialized subject while fresh students focus on all the subjects. But there are some prerequisite qualities that must exist in both types of students to get more benefit from the university course like learning power, personal interest in the subjects. Without these prerequisite qualities none of them get benefit. For illustration, if industry experienced student has low learning power than fresh student then certainly fresh student will get more benefit as compared to experienced student. But it’s true that experienced students can contribute more in the class in their specialized subject.
During my graduation, I had a chance to study with one fellow, who has more than 3 years of experience in software house. He has lot of responsibilities in his home because he has two dependents. This was a main reason he could not give enough times for studies. As a result he was behind us in the studies. On the other hand, we (fresh students) polish our skills with the help of his extra ordinary skills in programming (subject of computer science). In my point of view, experienced guys have to exert extra energy to manage their studies.
To conclude, above discussed prerequisite qualities should exist in both type of students to get more benefit. However, it’s true that students with industry experience can contribute more in their specialized subject.
Dr. Matthew, can you please evaluate this essay and please tell me what band can I achieve with this essay.
It’s believed that getting experience before higher education aid students to understand the courses easily and effectively as compared to the fresh students. On the other hand it’s also believed that fresh students can take more benefit due to their learning curiosity. In my point of view that there are some prerequisite qualities that helps both types of students to get more benefit from the university courses. In the coming lines, I will discuss the two point of views along with prerequisite qualities that help both type of students in studies and will also give example from my personal experience.
Firstly, Industry experienced student can get more benefit only on their specialized subject as higher education degree consist of several specialized subjects. For example in Computer Science there are several sub-disciplines like programming, databases, and networking. On the other hand, fresh students have more curiosity than experienced fellow. This is because experienced student focus only on their specialized subject while fresh students focus on all the subjects. But there are some prerequisite qualities that must exist in both types of students to get more benefit from the university course like learning power, personal interest in the subjects. Without these prerequisite qualities none of them get benefit. For illustration, if industry experienced student has low learning power than fresh student then certainly fresh student will get more benefit as compared to experienced student. But it’s true that experienced students can contribute more in the class in their specialized subject.
During my graduation, I had a chance to study with one fellow, who has more than 3 years of experience in software house. He has lot of responsibilities in his home because he has two dependents. This was a main reason he could not give enough times for studies. As a result he was behind us in the studies. On the other hand, we (fresh students) polish our skills with the help of his extra ordinary skills in programming (subject of computer science). In my point of view, experienced guys have to exert extra energy to manage their studies.
To conclude, above discussed prerequisite qualities should exist in both type of students to get more benefit. However, it’s true that students with industry experience can contribute more in their specialized subject.