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Posted: Sat Apr 11, 2015 4:41 am
International exchange programmes for teenage school students have more advantages than disadvantages. To what extent do you agree?
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In a world where we are overwhelmed by the conflicts and competition, never in history was the education so emphasized as in modern society. Due to globalisation, teenage students have the more opportunities to explore the world via international exchange programmes. As beneficial as this development is to the students, its drawbacks should not be forgotten.
Admittedly, no one can deny the fact that the culture shock students are going to experience. Some students might not able to compromise with the new living habits. Moreover, there are chances of reverse culture shock where students could not acclimate with their home country anymore. But it does not mean that students are discouraged from joining the international exchange programmes. Such perception actually does not fit into the larger picture.
From education perspective, this program helps students to enhance interest in global issues as well as broaden general knowledge. It is a great opportunity for them to learn something new through the different teaching method from the host schools. Not to mention, students will have deeper understanding on the foreign language and culture.
From personal perspective, students can sharpen their personal skills and become more independent. Outside from their family support and comfort zone, their social skills and maturity can be boosted. In the future, students who continue their tertiary studies from foreign countries will find themselves integrated into the new environment easier than others.
In conclusion, it has always been a dilemma controversy for the adults to determine the impacts of the international exchange programmes to the teenage students. I would concede the culture shock is likely to impact students negatively. Despite that, prodigious the merits of exchange programmes are. Overall, nothing would please me to see the students receive proper guidance and consultation from the school representative throughout the whole program.
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Can someone please assess my essay, im targeting band 7.
thanks in advance.
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In a world where we are overwhelmed by the conflicts and competition, never in history was the education so emphasized as in modern society. Due to globalisation, teenage students have the more opportunities to explore the world via international exchange programmes. As beneficial as this development is to the students, its drawbacks should not be forgotten.
Admittedly, no one can deny the fact that the culture shock students are going to experience. Some students might not able to compromise with the new living habits. Moreover, there are chances of reverse culture shock where students could not acclimate with their home country anymore. But it does not mean that students are discouraged from joining the international exchange programmes. Such perception actually does not fit into the larger picture.
From education perspective, this program helps students to enhance interest in global issues as well as broaden general knowledge. It is a great opportunity for them to learn something new through the different teaching method from the host schools. Not to mention, students will have deeper understanding on the foreign language and culture.
From personal perspective, students can sharpen their personal skills and become more independent. Outside from their family support and comfort zone, their social skills and maturity can be boosted. In the future, students who continue their tertiary studies from foreign countries will find themselves integrated into the new environment easier than others.
In conclusion, it has always been a dilemma controversy for the adults to determine the impacts of the international exchange programmes to the teenage students. I would concede the culture shock is likely to impact students negatively. Despite that, prodigious the merits of exchange programmes are. Overall, nothing would please me to see the students receive proper guidance and consultation from the school representative throughout the whole program.
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Can someone please assess my essay, im targeting band 7.
thanks in advance.