a positive experience in your teeange
Posted: Sun Jun 15, 2014 9:11 am
This is a latest frequent topic.
Hi, Allen_Zhang,
Thank you for sharing about your experiences playing basketball. Your story is inspirational, and this is coming from a person who was horrible at basketball in school!
Your vocabulary was good. I heard words like, “bullied” and “mocked” and good conversational phrases like “to be honest.” You spoke some informal words and phrases and some more formal ones. This gave your speech a good balance between the two, which is perfect for the interview situation.
Your organization was great as well. You gave a bit of background, told your story in order, and you explained where it was necessary. You did not speak too long about any one part of the story, and you drew a solid conclusion at the end.
Your fluency is good, although you did have some pronunciation and phrasing problems. You are not difficult to understand, overall. However, your speaking speed is a bit slow. You seem to chunk words one at a time, meaning that it sounds like you are not speaking phrases and sentences, but just one or two words at a time.
As far as pronunciation goes, the “n” sound seems to give you some difficulty. For example, it sounded like you said, “Lo one liked me,” instead of “No one liked me.” In addition, you missed the “v” sound in “very” and said “wery” instead.
Some other points:
After I entered my high school – No “my” here, just “After I entered high school. . .”
When you were talking about whether or not basketball was a game you should have played because you were short, you should have said, “Basketball was not a game I should have taken part in.”
They recruit me – They recruitED me.
Basketball match – basketball match
I shoot the big ball in the first quarter of the game. – I made an important basket in the first quarter of the game.
Best wishes as you continue to practice!