Essay part 2 - Writing test
Posted: Mon Jun 09, 2014 6:01 pm
I would like a review in the essay below.
Thanks in advance.
Gustavo
TOPIC: Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. -- To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
For many centuries, sports events has been an outstanding way to gather around people from all over the world to enjoy the games. Nowadays, Football World Cup as well as many other international sports tournaments has a noticeable role, decreasing the worldwide conflicts and also filling everyone with good patriotic emotions. This essay will demonstrate the facts to sustain this thesis.
To begin with, having an international sport tournament drain all people attention through out the world, and consequently, reducing the focus in the internal and external conflicts. For example, when the football World Cup starts, some countries that are constantly fighting each other have a drastic reduction in the violence incidents. It happens because the government and media advertise the World Cup in order to claim everybody's attention to the event, hence, making everybody busy enough to don't have time to threat their enemies. Thus it is clear that sports events can be a great weapon against conflicts.
Furthermore, the advertisements that these competitions have increase significantly the patriotism in all the nations. For instance, in Brazil due to all the internal problems, a significant percentage of Brazilians are upset of living there, however, when it is the year of World Cup, the media advertises stimulate everyone to ignore the issues for a while, and support, with all heart, their team. Therefore, these kind of event can definitely increase the love and patriotic emotions of a country.
In conclusion, upon analysing these facts we can clearly see that sports events are very helpful to our planet, decreasing the conflicts and also improving the patriotism felling around the world, specially in the underdeveloped countries like Brazil.
Thanks in advance.
Gustavo
TOPIC: Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. -- To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
For many centuries, sports events has been an outstanding way to gather around people from all over the world to enjoy the games. Nowadays, Football World Cup as well as many other international sports tournaments has a noticeable role, decreasing the worldwide conflicts and also filling everyone with good patriotic emotions. This essay will demonstrate the facts to sustain this thesis.
To begin with, having an international sport tournament drain all people attention through out the world, and consequently, reducing the focus in the internal and external conflicts. For example, when the football World Cup starts, some countries that are constantly fighting each other have a drastic reduction in the violence incidents. It happens because the government and media advertise the World Cup in order to claim everybody's attention to the event, hence, making everybody busy enough to don't have time to threat their enemies. Thus it is clear that sports events can be a great weapon against conflicts.
Furthermore, the advertisements that these competitions have increase significantly the patriotism in all the nations. For instance, in Brazil due to all the internal problems, a significant percentage of Brazilians are upset of living there, however, when it is the year of World Cup, the media advertises stimulate everyone to ignore the issues for a while, and support, with all heart, their team. Therefore, these kind of event can definitely increase the love and patriotic emotions of a country.
In conclusion, upon analysing these facts we can clearly see that sports events are very helpful to our planet, decreasing the conflicts and also improving the patriotism felling around the world, specially in the underdeveloped countries like Brazil.
