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Writing Task 2

Posted: Wed Jun 04, 2014 3:48 am
by gkm90
Hello,

I'd appreciate any review. :mrgreen:

Topic - Public transportation is a great way to travel, particularly within a metropolis. The Shanghai metro is the most convenient way to get around the city. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some metropolis nowadays are getting so huge and crowded that makes public transportation the best option to move around. Considering the developed cities like Shangai, it is totally agreed that public transportation like train is the best way to get around due to it safety and comfortability.

Firstly, by using a train the chances you got to have an accident or be stolen are almost null. For example if you use you own car to drive inside a crowded city you will probably face traffic jams, reckless imprudences, robbers trying to ambush you at traffic lights. However if you use a public transport all these incidents could be avoided. Although drive your own car give you more flexibility, take a train will increase significantly your security.

Secondly, you don't need to know which direction take to arrive in your destination, all you have to do is sit down and relax. Due to this fact most of people after a long day of activities prefer to use a public transport to reach their destination, preventing all the stress they may have by driving their own vehicle.

In summary, public transportation provides many advantages related to security and wellness, specially in wealthy cities which are more likely to have a high quality public transport system. Moreover, if you are a tourist, as you may not know the directions, a train might be a perfect guide in this case. Therefore it is clearly one of the best options to travel particularly within a metropolis.

Re: Writing Task 2

Posted: Wed Jun 04, 2014 9:27 am
by durai
I think, this question nowhere present in IELTS test except China


Some metropolis nowadays are more spacious that makes public transportation the best option to move around. Considering the developed cities like Shangai, it is totally agreed that public transportation likethe train is the best way to get around due to its safety and comfortability.

Firstly, by using a train the chances of meeting an accident or possessions stolen by soemone are almost null. For example, if you use you own car to drive in a crowded city you will probably face traffic jams, reckless imprudences, robbers trying to ambush you at traffic lights. However, if you use a public transport all these incidents could be avoided. (you need to prove how train journey is safe and secure Although drive your own car give you more flexibility, take a train will significantly increase your security.

Secondly, you don't need to know which direction takes to arrive at your destination. All you have to do is sit down and relax. Due to this fact, most of people after a long day of activities prefer to use a public transport to reach their place. Thus, they prevent all the stress they may have by driving their own vehicle. argument is not extended with examples, very weak response

In summary, public transportation provides many advantages related to security and wellness, especially in wealthy cities which are more likely to have a high quality public transport system. Moreover, if you are a tourist, as you may not know the directions, a train might be a perfect guide in this case. you no need to recommend tourist in the conclusion, here you just point out the above cases and give some recommendation Therefore it is clearly one of the best options to travel particularly within a metropolis.


Well, your task response is very weak, no grammar control. Try to make simple and sentences which are very clear in meaning.

Some poor word choices impede communication. Lacks coherence

Overall band 5.5 to 6 (I am not an assessor)

Re: Writing Task 2

Posted: Tue Oct 18, 2016 9:52 am
by kongu.suresh
Public transport is imperative to ease the traffic of the large cities. The underground trains in metros undoubtedly helped to condense the vehicle movement. Therefore, it can be argued that metro is the most convenient way to get around a city. It will be proven by how the underground train seamlessly blend through the cities and allow the riders to avoid traffic.

Population in major cities around the global has been increasing rapidly. it is causing major delay while travelling through own transport. Good public transport in cities could help avoid the traffic congestion. For example, Metro in London city rated one of the best public transport in the world. The underground train cover most of the places in the cities which moving freely around without any hindrance. Thus, it is cogent from this example metro's is handy to wander in the city.

Secondly, developed transportation system assist to reduce the traffic in the population dense cities. Major cities around the globe affected with abundant traffic. It is causing enormous delay and impact the environment. For example, It is estimated that people spends average 12 years in life for travelling where there is no public transport, whereas good transport system is reducing it. This proves how the public transport can reduce the traffic.

In summary, There is no doubt that own transport provides the flexibility in travel but public transport allow the commuters to travel without any hassle and help the environment also, Therefore, it is important that governing body in major cities has to implement the good public service.

Re: Writing Task 2

Posted: Wed Oct 26, 2016 7:26 pm
by Flick
kongu.suresh wrote:Public transport is imperative to ease the congestion in large cities. The underground trains undoubtedly help to reduce the number of vehicles. Therefore, it can be argued that the metro is the most convenient way to get around a city. This will be proven by how the underground train system easily crosses a city, allowing riders to avoid traffic.

Population in major cities around the globe has been increasing rapidly. It is causing major delays during daily commutes. Good public transport in cities could help reduce the traffic congestion. For example, the Metro in London is rated one of the best public transport systems in the world. The underground train covers most of the places in the cities which moving freely around without any hindrance.(<--I don't understand this sentence.) Thus, it is cogent from this example that metros are a convenient was to travel within a city.

Secondly, a developed transportation system helps to reduce the traffic in densely populated areas. Major cities around the globe struggle with abundant traffic. It is causing enormous delays and impacting the environment. For example, it is estimated that people spend on average 12 years of their life commuting where there is no public transport. However, a good transport system can reduce this number. This proves how public transport can help ease congestion.

In summary, there is no doubt that having one's own transport provides flexibility in travel, but public transport allows commuters to travel without any hassle and help the environment as well. Therefore, it is important that the governing body in major cities implements good public service.