Please benchmark my speaking with Band 9

[saqibali]

Dear All,
My previous Speaking score is 7.Please benchmark my speaking with band 9.


http://vocaroo.com/i/s0dXgJap8AWs

http://www.ieltsnetwork.com/download/file.php?id=207

Thanks a lot.

[lmoore]

Saqibali,
Hello, and thank you for sharing your thoughts about the interview questions.
Your organization and use of transitions and connectors was quite good. I heard you use, “first,” “second,” “third,” and “multiple reasons that will support my statement,” for example. These transitions and connectors will link ideas nicely for the listener. I think you can use more sophisticated transitions and connectors, though. You could try “moreover,” “furthermore,” “in addition,” etc. to add reasons and “finally” to end a list of reasons.
Your pronunciation was difficult to understand at times, and it wasn’t just because you were on a bus.  For example, I listed to “The best entertainment in this time is mobile and associated ? that make it smarter” three times, and I could not get the word after “associated.” Also, you pronounce “question” like “keschun,” and it really needs the “w” after the “k” sound. So it should sound like “KWESchun.”
Your sentence construction and structure needs some work. For example, instead of “I would like to give a load of questions, and I will give answers by myself,” you could have said, “I would like to read questions and give answers to each one. “ Another instance of this was “most costly compared to other parts of the city,” which should have been “the most expensive in the city.” In addition, “is much comfortable compared to” should have been “is much more comfortable.” I would suggest practicing your comparatives and superlatives. Finally, you said, “First and for most important reason is mobile is always in your hands.” This should be, “First and most importantly, THE mobile is always in your hands.”
Your subject / verb agreement was generally pretty good. However, there was a sentence where you said, “The mobile only USE a small battery.” This should have been “uses.”
Your speaking speed is rather slow. It wasn’t so slow that I had a hard time following your meaning, but it could be faster.
Your vocabulary is very specific and technical, which is good. I heard you use “remote access features,” “synchronize,” and “flexibility.” Finally, just a small note, when you are talking about money and dollars in the hundreds, you want to say the “hundred.” For example, you wouldn’t say, “one fifty dollars,” but instead, you would say, “one hundred fifty dollars.”
Best wishes as you continue to practice!

[saqibali]

This helped.
Thanks a lot, my friend.