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Task II

Posted: Sat Apr 12, 2014 9:03 am
by Muxtar
Happiness is considered very important in life.
Why is it difficult to define?
What factors are important in achieving happiness?

Sometimes it is argued that happiness is quite difficult matter to define, because people have different view about this concern. Some people may imagine happiness to gain achievement ,while others think this is just emotions, relationships and so on.
As I noted,people have different approaches to this issue.Happiness depends on peoples desires,dreams and choices.For example,it is more common for a large group of clever people making a decision about their career in an early age.From their point of view,happiness is studying at a well-known university,climbing to ladder of career,setting up own business and to being informed from different parts of the world.In contrast, the majority of intolerance people feel money as a source of happiness.
There is no doubt that there are host of factors in achieving our happiness.For instance,If student has a desire to enter a university,the first thing he will has to undertake is fear.Another factor is self –confident and reality of our aim.Taking the case of interview as a striking example,when employer asks you a few questions ,you should put your anxiety aside and to evidence your potential skills and knowledge.
To sum up, although it is difficult to achieve happiness,I think it is no impossible for people.

Re: Task II

Posted: Sat Apr 12, 2014 10:04 am
by durai
Hi Muxtar,

Your essay count only 219 words, which is very less, you may get only band 5 maximum for task achievement.

repeated words : happiness 7
people 6

you may use, happiness, enjoyment, enjoy, joy, joyful, happy, happiest moments, pleasure, laughter, prosperity, well-being, delighted, excitement

people, citizens, person, individuals, public, family, friends, population, society, nation,



your essay partly answers the question, grammar mistakes are visible and impede communication.

overall looks band 5 ( I am not an assessor)