Opinion essay. Crime.

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Opinion essay. Crime.

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Prison is the best punishment for criminals. Discuss

The discussion that whether or not jail may be considered as the only remedy provided by law that can seriously prevent the committing of a crime is a debatable one. There are logical arguments provided by supporters of both views. It is strongly agreed with the concern that penal measures must be weighed in comparison to their deterrence potential, as well as accompanied by educational plans in some cases. Firstly, this essay will argue why prison is the only one effective remedy for serious crimes, and than will discuss alternative forms of punishments, followed by a reasoned conclusion.

At first, the reiteration of some serious crimes may be prevented only be limiting freedom of movement. Prison may be as seen as the only way to safeguard that the community may not be harmed by people who have committed certain kind of crimes. As a case in point, the Italian legislation (Treatment of offenders Act 2000) provides that offenders must be kept in jail for a period of time which is proportional to the severity of the crime. On the other hand, someone would argue that criminals may be re-educated during their prison time and released before the end of their sentence

Secondly, certain kinds of crimes do not need extreme punitive measures such as incarceration. Alternative forms of punishment may provide a valid tool to prevent minor crimes while assuring the safety of the community. Research carried out by the British Law Society in 2015 has shown that crimes such as robberies, frauds and other crimes which do not involve people’s physical integrity, can be prevented effectively by measures such as house arrest, or strict surveillance by 50 per cent of cases. This of course, sometimes needs a huge amount of public funds in order to be effectively implemented by public authorities.

To summarize, while imprisonment may be the only effective remedy for major kinds of crimes, alternative forms of punishment may achieve the goal of preventing less serious crimes. In my opinion, penal measures must be applied in relation to their effect to prevent the committing of new crimes, as well as followed during their execution, by educational plans that can re-introduce previous criminals back into the community as good citizens in some cases.
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Re: Opinion essay. Crime.

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Hello!

Very good, but I'm still highly suspicious of the grammar.

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Chitarra90 wrote:Prison is the best punishment for criminals. Discuss

The discussion of whether or not jail may be considered as the only remedy provided by law that can seriously prevent the committing of a crime is a debatable one. There are logical arguments provided by supporters of both views. It is strongly agreed with the concern that penal measures must be weighed in comparison with their deterrence potential, as well as accompanied by educational plans in some cases. Firstly, this essay will argue why prison is the only effective remedy for serious crimes, and then will discuss alternative forms of punishments, followed by a reasoned conclusion.

At first, the repetition of some serious crimes may be prevented only by limiting freedom of movement. Prison may be seen as the only way to safeguard the community so it may not be harmed by people who have committed certain types of crimes. As a case in point, the Italian legislation (Treatment of Offenders Act 2000) provides that offenders must be kept in jail for a period of time which is proportional to the severity of the crime. On the other hand, someone could argue that criminals may be re-educated during their prison time and released before the end of their sentence.

Secondly, certain kinds of crimes do not need extreme punitive measures such as incarceration. Alternative forms of punishment may provide a valid tool to prevent minor crimes while assuring the safety of the community. Research carried out by the British Law Society in 2015 has shown that crimes such as robberies, frauds and other crimes which do not involve people’s physical integrity, can be prevented effectively by measures such as house arrest, or strict surveillance in 50 per cent of cases. This, of course, sometimes needs a huge amount of public funds in order to be effectively implemented by public authorities.

To summarize, while imprisonment may be the only effective remedy for major kinds of crimes, alternative forms of punishment may achieve the goal of preventing less serious crimes. In my opinion, penal measures must be applied in relation to their efficacy of preventing the committing of new crimes, as well as followed during their execution, by educational plans that can re-introduce ex-criminals back into the community as good citizens in some cases.
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