Railway

[RonyM]

Some people say that government should invest in trains and the subway system to prevent traffic congestion in large cities. Others, however, think it should build wider roads. Discuss both views and give your opinion with examples.
Traffic congestion is one of the most eminent drawbacks to the modern life mainly in large cities which necessitates governments finding different ways to solve it . Calling for government investmnt in building subways and railway systems is one of the suggested ideas is while the other suggestion is to plan for wider roads . In my opinion, each of these proposed notions could be workable taking into consideration circumstances of its implementations .
Regarding the first proposed solution, it is clear that it has many benefits. First , many countries have very limited space to build wide routes or even widen the existing ones .So , it would be quite workable to them to build underground right underneath their overcrowded cities . Secondly, the unchallenged ability of rapid transit railroads to transport a large number of people over short periods of time to remote places makes it the most convenient public transportation facility mainly in densely populated cities as Shanghai and London.
Finally, its positive impact on environment and energy resources as most of these lines use electric energy .In general, investment in subways and trains is the solution of choice for most of metropolitan cities.

The other proposed solution to the overcrowded traffic problem is to plan for wide routes .Despite the fact that this suggestion is not as advantageous as building railway lines,in terms of its feasibility in overcrowded cities and its environmental impact, it still has some positive aspects .For example, it is cheaper to build roads than opening or rehabilitating new railway network. In addition, it doesn't require a sophisticated control apparatus .Moreover, the avoidance of subway related crimes is another reason behind this governmental choice .In fact, this choice is more suitable for less developed poorer countries.

To sum up, the crisis of traffic congestion needs to be urgently solved .Despite the easiness of building wide roads for some governments, opening new underground and rapid transit trains is ,in my opinion, enormously promising to solve this problem.

[David.IELTS.Examiner]

Hello!

Overall, very good! You make and develop some excellent points, using a wide variety of grammar and vocabulary. Everything is clear. The main thing missing is an explanation of the problems. If these solutions are so obvious, why haven't they been implemented? Why do we still have traffic jams? I mean, if you think politicians are unimaginative, I'm with you, but still there has to be more ...

All the best,
David

[Flick]

Some people say that government should invest in trains and the subway system to prevent traffic congestion in large cities. Others, however, think it should build wider roads. Discuss both views and give your opinion with examples.

Traffic congestion is one of the most eminent drawbacks to modern life, especially in large cities, which necessitates governments finding different ways to solve it. Calling for government investmnt in building subways and railway systems is one of the suggested ideas, while another suggestion is to plan for wider roads . In my opinion, each of these proposed notions could be workable taking into consideration circumstances of its implementation.

Regarding the first proposed solution, it is clear that it has many benefits. First, many countries have very limited space to build wide routes or even widen the existing ones. So, it would be quite workable for them to build an underground transport system below their overcrowded cities. Secondly, the unchallenged ability of rapid transit railroads to transport a large number of people over short periods of time to remote places makes it the most convenient public transportation facility, mainly in densely populated cities as Shanghai and London.
Finally, itwould have a positive impact on the environment and energy resources as most of these lines use electric energy. In general, investment in subways and trains is the solution of choice for most metropolitan cities.

The other proposed solution to the overcrowded traffic problem is to plan for wider routes. Despite the fact that this suggestion is not as advantageous as building railway lines in terms of its feasibility in overcrowded cities and its environmental impact, it still has some positive aspects. For example, it is cheaper to build roads than to open or rehabilitate a new railway network. In addition, it doesn't require a sophisticated control apparatus. Moreover, the avoidance of subway-related crimes is another reason behind this governmental choice. In fact, this choice is more suitable for less developed, poorer countries.

To sum up, the crisis of traffic congestion needs to be urgently solved. Despite the easiness of building wide roads for some governments, opening new underground and rapid transit trains is, in my opinion, enormously promising to solve this problem.