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sudeep
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Some people believe that punishment is the only purpose of prisons, while others believe that prisons exist for various reasons. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There are two prevailing views regarding the use of prisons. First one argues that punishment is the sole purpose of prison. However, second one believes that prison could be used for other functions. I am going to discuss both views, while I am in favor of using prison as a correction centre, where many life skills could be learnt and taught.

On the one hand, jail could serve the purpose of punishing wrong doers. Punishment as a revenge could be in the form of coercion, torture, harassment, or other stern actions. These might be applied to punish the guilty so that other defaulters are discouraged. For example, in Nepal, during, the Rana regime, democracy fighters were kept inside the jail without any facilities, where most of them died due to communicable diseases. In that era, prison was utilized for punishment only.

On the other hand, prison could be used for various purposes. The tasks could range from vocational training to research activities. For instance, the concept of open correction centre is emerging these days, where convicts are not held in custody. They are monitored for their activities from outside so that social harmony is maintained, and it helps to reduce crime rates drastically.

Moreover, teaching and learning activities could be facilitated at the prison, which develops capacity of the prisoners. The setback can be positively utilized by the prisoners by sincerely learning, sharing, improving and delivering something to the local market with their skill and hard work inside the correction centre, or jail. Last year, there was news that followed prisoner, who could buy a small plot of land from the income generated by selling crafts produced inside the prison.

In conclusion, prisons are functioning as a punishment centre in some places, whereas, in other places, they are delivering some goods to the local consumers by using the skills inside the correction centre. I absolutely agree that jails could be developed as a correction centre, from where all stakeholders could benefit.
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sudeep wrote:Some people believe that punishment is the only purpose of prisons, while others believe that prisons exist for various reasons. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There are two prevailing views regarding the use of prisons. The first one argues that punishment is the sole purpose of prison. However, the second one believes that prison can be used for other functions. While I am in favor of using prison as a correction centre where many life skills can be learnt, I am going to discuss both views.

On the one hand, jail serves the purpose of punishing wrong-doers. Punishment as a revenge could be in the form of coercion, torture, harassment, or other stern actions. These might be applied to punish the guilty so that other defaulters are discouraged. For example, in Nepal during the Rana regime, democracy fighters were kept inside a jail without any facilities, where most of them died due to communicable diseases. In that era, prison was utilized for punishment only.

On the other hand, prison could be used for various purposes. Tasks could range from vocational training to research activities. For instance, the concept of an open correction centre is emerging these days, where convicts are not held in custody. They are monitored for their activities from outside so that social harmony is maintained, and it helps to reduce reoffending drastically.

Moreover, teaching and learning activities could be facilitated at the prison, which develops the skills of the prisoners. Prisontime can be positively utilized by the prisoners by learning, sharing, improving and delivering something to the local market with their hard work inside the correction centre or jail. Last year, a prisoner was able to buy a small plot of land because of the income generated by selling crafts produced inside the prison.

In conclusion, prisons are functioning as a punishment centre in some places, whereas in other places, they are delivering some goods to the local consumers by using the skills taught inside the correction centre. I absolutely agree that jails could be developed as a correction centre, from which all stakeholders could benefit.
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