Writing task 2 Education

[ms5]

Hi everybody!
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(Aim - band 7)

Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. Others think that it is always better to have a teacher. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons to develop your essay.

Different people prefer different methods of education: either to study on their own or with the help of a teacher. Both points of view have a right on existance, both of them have their own advantages. But nevertheless in my opinion, the process of education is more thorough if it is under expert’s control.
First of all, the fact is that monitoring is conducted by a teacher over a whole process of learning. Using their special skills and knowledge such professionals are able to correct an educational program for children on a timely basis to make it more suitable for them. As puipils usually seem to have various talents and capabilities it is very important for tutors to find specific aproach to everybody.
As well a teacher is a person who can answer children’s disputable questions. This is rather a material component of studying because answering difficult questions on their own may make children to be under a delusion regarding a correct answer. This is also a timesaving procedure as it requires only a few clear actions from pupils.
Another major preference consists of opened avenues for having feedback for those who study with teachers. This afforts children to have actionable pieces of advice from their tutors in relation to their improvement. This also fortifies awareness among the trainees of their real abilities and mistakes they often make.
The above points prove that having a teacher can catalyze better learning process and results. It is absolutely vital to understand this fact in order to be well prepared for further educational and career opportunities.

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[argho1985]

Hi everybody!
Please, give your comment.
(Aim - band 7)

Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. Others think that it is always better to have a teacher. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons to develop your essay.

Different people prefer different methods of education: either to study on their own or with the help of a teacher. Both points of view have a right on existance, both of them have their own advantages. But nevertheless in my opinion, the process of education is more thorough if it is under an expert’s control.
First of all, the fact is that monitoring is been conducted by a teacher over a whole process of learning (Instead of first of all you can also start with At present, ). Using their special skills and knowledge, such professionals are able to correct an educational program for children on a timely basis to make it more suitable for them. As puipils (pupils) usually seem to have various talents and capabilities it is very important for tutors to find specific aproach (approach) to everybody.
As well (Also), a teacher is a person who can answer children’s disputable questions. This is rather a material component of studying because answering difficult questions on their own may make children to be under a delusion regarding a correct answer. This is also a time saving procedure as it requires only a few clear actions from pupils.
Another major preference consists of opened avenues for having feedback for those who study with teachers. This afforts children to have actionable pieces of advice from their tutors in relation to their improvement. This also fortifies awareness among the trainees of their real abilities and mistakes they often make.
The above points prove that having a teacher can catalyze better learning process and results. It is absolutely vital to understand this fact in order to be well prepared for further educational and career opportunities.

263 words

Hi,

Some of the vocabulary which you have used is making various things in the essay more confusing.. You need to pay attention to your grammar. Many sentences could have been written in a more simpler way in order to make the reader understand about what you are saying.

Good content..

Thanks
Argho

[ms5]

Thanks a lot for the good comment. I really appreciate it.