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[neha]

Writing Task: 1

The chart below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The bar graph elucidates the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995. The x-axis shows the years between 1985 and 1995. While the y-axis quantifies the number of Japanese travelers in millions travelled foreign countries.

From the year 1985 to the year of 1990, the number of Japanese tourists dramatically inclined from five to eleven millions. It shows a mild decline in the following year by 0.5 million that is 10.5 million. Yet, the figure again sky-rocketed fo9r the further four years from 1991 to 1995 by an increase of 3.5 million. From the prior value of 10.5, it means it increased to fifteen million in 1995.

The next line graph illustrates Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market. The percentage of Japanese coming to Australia is displayed on the y-axis. In contrast to that, the years are on the x-axis from 1985 to 1995. Before 1985 to start of 1985, the percentage of Japanese coming in Australia rose to two percent. The figure steeply rose to 4.5 percent from 1985 to 1988. Then in the following year it markedly dipped to 4.1 percent. On the other hand, it again steadily inclined to more than six percent from 1985 to 1993. However, in the next year it mildly decrease to six percent.

[neha]

please help ,i am anxiously waiting for a feedback

[Johnson zhang]

where is the chart?

[Flick]

Writing Task: 1

The chart below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The bar graph shows the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995. The x-axis shows the years between 1985 and 1995. While the y-axis quantifies the number of Japanese travelers in millions travelling to foreign countries. (<-- These last two sentences are not really necessary.)
From 1985 to 1990, the number of Japanese tourists dramatically increased from five to eleven million. There was a slight decrease in the following year by 500,000 to 10.5 million. However, the figure again sky-rocketed from 1991 to 1995, rising from just over ten million to fifteen million in 1995.

The next line graph illustrates Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market. The percentage of Japanese coming to Australia is displayed on the y-axis. In contrast to that, the years are on the x-axis from 1985 to 1995.(<-- Again, these two sentences are not necessary. Instead, you could state that there is a general increase in market share over the ten years, then get more specific in the following sentences.) In 1985, (<-- We don't know what the percentage was before 1985.) the percentage of Japanese coming to Australia was two percent. The figure steeply rose to 4.5 percent by 1988. Then, in the following year, it markedly dipped to 4.1 percent. From 1990 to 1993,, it again steadily improved to more than six percent. However, in 1994, there was a slight decrease to six percent.
(Don't forget to include a conclusion. It can be very simple. For example: In conclusion, as the number of Japanese tourists travelling overseas increased, so did Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market.)