Please Evaluate my first Writing Task one

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The graph illustrates the information about the number of students who are expected to study three popular languages, namely English, Spanish, and Mandarin over a ten-year period from 2020 to 2030.

Overall, what stands out from the graph suggests that the number of students of all three languages is likely to rise steadily over the period in question. English language will account for the highest number of students, while the other two languages, Spanish and Mandarin, will maintain their popularity with a relatively lower population of language learners. Another interesting fact is that English will be the most popular language among students in 2030, whereas Spanish is set to be the least popular language of choice in the same period.

Looking at the details, English language will commence the year 2020 at 550 million students. This figure then will rise steadily to 700 million in 2024, at which point it will experience a significant decline to approximately 630 million in the next year. Despite losing popularity in 2026, the number of English student will continue to rise consistently in the last two years, reaching nearly 720 million in 2030.

By contrast, starting the year 2020 at 200 million and finishing the year 2030 at just under 500 million, projections show that the number of Spanish students is estimated to increase steadily. With regard to Mandarin language, although in 2020 there will be just 100 million students willing to study this language, by 2026, this figure will have overtaken the number Spanish students. In 2030 Mandarin language will then continue to gain in popularity reaching a higher number students compared with the Spanish language at just around 580 million.