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Shokir
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The given table demonstrates information as regards percentage of various Australian family types living in poverty in 1999.
Overall, what stands out from the table is that solo parents was the most popular poor family category, nonetheless, the least popular one was aged couples.
To begin with single aged person straightly 6% of them lived not wealthy which meant 54 000 of Australian single aged citizens. Couple with no children hit slightly lesser number than single aged person 7% in percentage but considerably more in number (211 000 people).
Another poor family type was solo parents, whose proportion accounted for 21%, which meant 211 000 Australians. Even though, single with no children families’ proportion was 19% their quantity was the second most popular after couple with children who accounted for 12% with 933 000 people. However, only 4% of aged couples lived in poverty which meant 54 000 people. All in all, all households living in poverty in Australia was 11% with 1 837 000 inhabitants.
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David.IELTS.Examiner
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Post by David.IELTS.Examiner »

Hello!

Oh dear, you fell into the trap! Here, you are presented with with both total numbers and percentages. Sometimes, you have to be careful what you write. For example, you say that sole parents (not 'solo') was the most common (not 'popular') category, but this is not true. Check the number of people (not the percentage!) for 'couple with children'.

This task requires some skills with regard to grammar and organisation. It has to be clear which figures you are referring to - total number or proportion/percentage. You should choose between 1) old, no children, parents, and 2) singles and couples.

The introduction fails to mention total number and the overview needs to be more precise.

All the best,
David
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