Another sample of T1

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Shokir
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Another sample of T1

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The bar charts illustrate information about average years of schooling, number of scientists and technicians per 1000 people and amount of money spent on research and development in both developing and industrialized countries.

Overall, industrial countries explicitly dominated in all three categories.

Starting from average years of schooling, in 1980, developing countries accounted for just over two years of schooling. Nevertheless, industrialized countries accounted for 4 times as many years as developing countries at that juncture. Whereas, in the year of 1990 these rates were 2,6 years and 10,2 years respectively.

As about scientists and technicians, whose quantity in developing countries were almost 10 out of 1000 people in 1980, they reached just under 20 out of 1000 people in 1990. However, these people in industrialized countries were as 4 times lot as developing countries’ in both years.

On research and development projects industrialized countries spent much less money in 1980 (150$ billions) than in 1990 (350$ billions). Though, developing countries used approximately 50$ billions in 1980 which almost reduced to half in 1990.
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Re: Another sample of T1

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Hello!

Overall, quite good. You have included all the information and done some basic comparisons. In the overview, you have noted the single key fact, but not identified any other suitable statistics fro inclusion.

Vocabulary is good but there are numerous grammatical errors, some of them basic, e.g. were as 4 times lot as. I would recommend shorter sentences too.

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David
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Re: Another sample of T1

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Shokir wrote:The bar charts illustrate information about average years of schooling, number of scientists and technicians per 1000 people, and amount of money spent on research and development in both developing and industrialized countries.

Overall, industrial countries explicitly dominated in all three categories.

Starting with average years of schooling, in 1980, developing countries accounted for just over two years of schooling. In comparison, industrialized countries accounted for 4 times as many years as developing countries at that juncture, with just over eight years. Whereas, by 1990, these rates were 2.6 years and 10.2 years, respectively.

In regards to the number of scientists and technicians per thousand people, in developing countries there were about 10 in 1000 in 1980, and 20 out of 1000 people in 1990. However, in industrialized countries, there were four times as many scientists and technicians than in developing countries in both years.

On research and development projects, industrialized countries spent much less money in 1980 ($150 billion) than in 1990 ($350 billion). For developing countries, their spending dropped from approximately $50 billion in 1980 to around $25 billion in 1990.
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