Task II.please,evaluate my essay

[Muxtar]

In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as
completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning
and taking responsibility.
What are your opinions on this?

People have different views whether it is a valuable for children to work for certain amount of money or it is worthwile to get experience.Although there are convincing arguments in favor of evading from working for some kind of paid work,I personally believe that working in an early age is beneficial.

Firstly,it is important to note that children have a countless potential energy in terms of creation of continuing workplace or reliable carreer.At the same time these people have a better chance to be overwhelmed under the burden of difficulties of their life.There is likelihood that somebody who work as a salesman in any shop will presumably learn how to communicate with various kinds of people.In other word,such people it is expected to acquire significant work experience and consistently a great deal of money to provide their family with minimum amount of money.

As children seek to worklife, some workplaces can be seen a complex to these people and they can be involved in tough works which in turn lead to some inevitable injures on their healthy and mind .Moreover,if they are studying at school,there is no doubt that they will not draw their attention on school subject,homework as well.

To sum up, there are convincing points both for and against to ignore from working for any factory or company, I believe that working is always better than standing in the same position

[Mohammed]

obba menim stilimde yazirsan:)))

[Muxtar]

sen kimin stilinde yazmisan?:))

[Mohammed]

Simon menden ogurluyub:)