Please Correct My Essay to level of band 9

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Miaacoby
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Please Correct My Essay to level of band 9

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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

Advancement in Information technology has enhanced people dependency on global and internationally recognized languages like English, Arabic and Urdu. This trend has decreased dependency of people on local languages to the extent that every year some languages become extinct. Some people believe that this new trend will make life easier while some refute this statement. It is argued that development of fewer languages will make our life easier. Analyzing impact of this trend on business and cultural exchange will prove this stance.
First of all, development of fewer languages will help people establish business relations quickly and enhance benefits instantly. There is no second opinion that languages skills are most important in communication and hence in business. If the current trend results in availability of fewer languages, then it will be easier for people to learn languages quickly and start trading in few days. Development in convenience in communication will impact business results and this in turn will make life of people easier. Thus impact of trend of fewer languages on simplicity of life can be seen.
Secondly, trend of fewer languages will make cultural exchange easier and in turn it will make life simpler. If there are only fewer languages in world, then it will be easier for people to learn other languages and start enjoying their cultural items including songs and movies. This will result in availability of additional enjoyment sources for people. As a result, this will make life of people simpler and easier. Thus it can be seen that trend of fewer languages will make life of people easier.
Some people argue that the trend of fewer languages will make life of people easier while some do not believe this statement. After analyzing the impact of fewer languages on business outcome and cultural exchange, it is concluded that the trend of distinction of few languages each year will make our life simpler. Hence it is recommended that governments should encourage reliability and dependency on few languages.
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