Please kindly assess my writing task 1 .THANKS

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jayani
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Please kindly assess my writing task 1 .THANKS

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The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960,1980 and 2000.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features ,and make comparisons where relevent.
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The bar chart illustrates, percentages of people who used 4 different traveling methods to work in a city of Europe, in 1960,1980 and 2000.

Overall, by analyzing the given data it is noticeable that over the 40 year period, the car passengers have risen significantly, while a steep decline was experienced in number of people travelled by foot and users of bike . However a minor fluctuation was seen with bus travelers .

With regard to the car passengers, in 1960 approximately just over 5% of people used cars,which then rose to (around)a quarter by 1980 and finally peaked to marginally above 35% by 2000.

Furthermore,number of walkers had a dramatic decrease of about 20% by 1980 from 35% in 1960 followed with a marginal drop of around 7% by 2000.Silimilarly bike riders have experienced a reduction from just over 25% to 8% (aproximately) from 1960 to 2000.

In terms of bus related transportation, even though there was a slight rise in 1980, it is evident that number of people travelled by busses has not been changed throughout the time which kept at a range of about 17% - 20% .
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Re: Please kindly assess my writing task 1 .THANKS

Post by David.IELTS.Examiner »

Hello!

Overall, a good report. However, there is some unusual phrasing, e.g. bike riders have experienced ...

All the best,
David
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