These days, too many people maintain their health by relying on doctors and medicine, rather than by following a healthy lifestyle. To what extent do you agree with this statement?
Modern technologies on medical sector have brought a new trend to survive well. Some people believe that taking help from specialists and medicine to maintain health is the preferable way. But I tend to think that healthy lifestyle will give us better life and make us always energetic.
No one can deny that maintaining a good lifestyle helps us to keep fit. Along with, some bad habits, including taking cigarette, alcohol, having junk food more and so on, can bring not only disadvantages but also threat to life. My grandfather is about 85 years old, he has no back pain and also other diseases because in his early life, he tried to maintain a routine for his own and family too. A healthy lifestyle, containing every positive facets of life, can give the potentiality to work more regarding to success. Moreover, some people think that medicine has the power to eradicate the diseases. However, many pieces of research are shown that taking over medicine has negative impacts to life.
On the other hand, some people in our society have much respect to doctors for keeping their healthy. They said some diseases, for example, are related with gene. Therefore, depending on specialists and medicine will help to live long. In addition, a study on “How to Live Long” had shown that people have much belief for their health because of their reluctance on healthy lifestyle. As far as I am concerned, of course we should take consultancy from doctors but much relying on them is not satisfactory.
In conclusion, though doctors and medicine are the blessing for us, but I think keeping a healthy lifestyle is the best option to make us fit and this will keep us far away from disease. Otherwise, this will take toll from our lives.
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Re: Hi, David Pls check my task-2
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Overall, quite good, but I think that you could develop points better rather than 'jumping' from one to another within each paragraph. For example, in the second main paragraph, you jump from respect for doctors to genes in the first 2 sentences. The connection is not explained.
All the best,
David
Overall, quite good, but I think that you could develop points better rather than 'jumping' from one to another within each paragraph. For example, in the second main paragraph, you jump from respect for doctors to genes in the first 2 sentences. The connection is not explained.
All the best,
David