Ta$k 2

[Wayfarer]

The best way to solve the worlds environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?


These days green issues are one of the primary concerns of scientists worldwide. So far there have been a number of attempts to discover an optimal solution to these problems. While it is being widely acknowledged that raising the price of fuel is the best way to conquer environmental issues, I hardly believe that this is likely to be the case.

Firstly, increasing the charge for fuel appears to tackle only one environmental concern while abandoning many others unsolved. By making fuel more expensive, amount of carbon dioxide produced by various vehicles will noticeably decline. As a result, air quality is likely to enhance which means that rate of global warming and pollution will be slowed down. However, this approach does not address other major problems like overpopulation, water contamination or animal extinction and so on.

Secondly, although there are certain merits of this approach, when fuel is made less affordable by the government, it does not bring accountability to individuals. That is to say, as a state makes a decision, people whose efforts must help to resolve the problem do not feel responsibility. What government needs to do is to ensure there are special nationwide publicity campaigns and programmes geared towards educating people of all ages about environmental consequences of their actions.

In sum, so-called best solution proposing us to increase the cost of fuel in order to tackle environmental issues turns out to be ineffective. The optimum approach, however, seems to be raising the awareness of individuals and encourage them to be greener or kinder to the environment.

[sebastian]

Nice text, good word count (not too short and not too long) and quite logical. The reader can understand what you think and why you think that way. Some nitpicks:

While it is being widely acknowledged that raising the price of fuel is the best way to conquer environmental issues

If it's something that's still open to debate, when it's not 'acknowledged' as much as it's 'suggested' or 'theorised'.

By making fuel more expensive, amount of carbon dioxide produced by various vehicles will noticeably decline.

Missing article.

What government needs to do is

Just one government? If so, it should be 'the government needs.' If you're talking about various nations' leaders, then it's plural: 'what governments need to do ...'

In sum, so-called best solution

Looks a bit odd, even though it's not technically incorrect. 'To sum up' works way better.

The optimum approach, however, seems to be raising the awareness of individuals and encourage them...

Both verbs should be in gerund (i.e., 'raising' is alright, 'encourage' is not - it should be 'encouraging', since both actions go with the verb to be: 'seems to be raising ... and seems to be encouraging...').