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[harris]

Some people think women should be allowed to join the army, the navy and the air force just like men.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Independence for a country is a key element to its existence in this world. Armed forces of a nation have the responsibility to guard their country from external threats. It is agreed that women should be allowed joint army, navy and air force. This argument will be analyzed by women’s caring attitude in military hospitals and their roles in management and military logistics .

Firstly, no doubt that naturally woman cannot compete with the physical strength of men but women in armed forces can serve better than men in specific domains. As an instance, the caring ability in women is sharper than men and they can betterly take care patients in military hospitals in role of nurses and doctors. Thus, this dominant ability in women commits the argument that women should be allowed to joint armed forces.

On the other side, the strength of armed forces aside to modern and technological weapons is a physically and mentally well trained force. Women compared to men have better management skills. As an example, women in armed forces not only can be given the roles in administration but also in military logistics. Under these circumstances, it can be proven that women should be allowed to get roles in army, navy and air force.

In a nutshell, if women are physically inferior to men, they have other natural abilities like caring and management skills in which they are superior to men. It is recommended, that women should be encouraged to join armed forces of a country in order to increase and strengthen the manpower of army, navy and airforce.

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Some people think women should be allowed to join the army, the navy and the air force just like men.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Independence for a country is a key element to its existence in this world. The armed forces of a nation have the responsibility to guard their country from external threats. It is agreed that women should be allowed to join the army, navy and air force. This argument will be based on women’s caring attitude in military hospitals and their roles in management and military logistics.

Firstly, while it is true that naturally woman cannot compete with the physical strength of men, women in the armed forces can serve better than men in specific domains. For instance, the caring ability in women is sharper than men and they can better take care of patients in military hospitals as nurses and doctors. Thus, this dominant ability in women supports the argument that women should be allowed to join the armed forces.

On the other side, the strength of the armed forces aside to modern and technological weapons is a physically and mentally well trained force.(<--I don't understand this sentence.) Women compared to men have better management skills. As an example, women in the armed forces not only can be given roles in administration but also in military logistics. Under these circumstances, it can be proven that women should be allowed to join the army, navy and air force.

In a nutshell, if women are physically inferior to men, they have other natural abilities like caring and management skills in which they are superior to men. It is recommended that women should be encouraged to join the armed forces of a country in order to increase and strengthen the manpower of the army, navy and airforce.

[harris]

Thank you so very much