Writing task 1- Smoking trends among Scottish females

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The table displayed smoking trends among Scottish females between the years 2003 and 2005. The data went without change for the first four age groups and dropped significantly for the last two age groups.

In the year 2003, more than 30% of Scottish females smoke from 16 to 59 years of age. The percentages fell from 22% to 13% in the 60-70 years group and 75+ years group, respectively. In 2004, the number grew from 26% in the 16-24 years group to 31% in the 25-34years group. However, declining figures of 27%, 22% and 13% were seen among the 45-59 years, 60-74 years and 75+ years groups, respectively.
In the year 2005, a figure of 27% was recorded for 16-24 years group. Slightly higher percentage of 29% is seen in the 25-34 years group and 28% in 35-44 years of age groups. The percentage peaked at 30% for 45-59 years group. Then the number fell tremendously to 24% in the 60-74 years group and to 11% in the 75+ years group. General overview of the graph reveals higher percentage of Scottish females smoking from 16-59 years of age; nonetheless the rate showed steady drop from 60 to 75+ years groups.

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The table displays smoking trends among Scottish females between 2003 and 2005. The data was consistent for the first four age groups and dropped significantly for the last two age groups.

In 2003, more than 30% of Scottish females aged 16 - 59 smoked. The percentages fell to 22% and 13% in the 60-70 year old group and 75+ year old group, respectively. In 2004, the number grew from 26% in the 16-24 year old group to 31% in the 25-34 year old group. However, declining figures of 27%, 22% and 13% were seen among the 45-59 year olds, 60-74 year olds and 75+ year old groups respectively.

In 2005, a figure of 27% was recorded for the 16-24 year olds. A slightly higher percentage of 29% is seen in the 25-34 year old group and 28% in the 35-44 year old group. The percentage peaked at 30% for the 45-59 yearolds. Then the number fell tremendously to 24% in the 60-74 yearolds and to 11% in the 75+ group. General overview of the graph reveals a higher percentage of Scottish females smoking from 16-59 years of age; nonetheless the rate showed a steady drop from 60 to 75+ year olds.