Can someone please review my Essay: 10-OCT

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Can someone please review my Essay: 10-OCT

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Topic:

Being a celebrity – such as a famous film star or sports personality – brings problems as well as benefits.
Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

Response:

Being a famous personality like Brad Pitt or Steven Gerrard tends to have good as well as bad points. From their point of view, the routine, load and responsibilities make it difficult for them to live their own life. But for outside world, they enjoy the best and lavish life style. I believe that being a celebrity has more benefits than problems. For example, they are financially very stable as compared to others. Also they possess a uniqueness which gives them priority and special treatment in all aspects of life. Both these point of views will be discussed in detail.

As we can see that most of the celebrities including film starts and sportsmen have a lot of financial stability. They have multiple investments and a lot of brands pay them for endorsing products. For example, Tiger Woods had endorsement with sports giant “Nike” for life time. The company used to pay him annual fees plus all the sports equipment and gear was free for life. Similar deals add financial stability. But unknown circumstances can result in a broken partnership. Sportsman can have a negative image because of this.

Similarly actors and athletes get special treatment in all aspects of life. They are treated as VIP wherever they go. For instance, front rows are always reserved for celebrities in majority of the events. They do not have to follow the rules or timings like normal individuals. They can come late and leave early as per their convenience. Hence, it gives them unique environment and priorities comforting their life style.

As it can be clearly observed that the charisma of being a celebrity has more benefits as compared to problems. Famous people get to enjoy a better life style including facilities and strong financial stability. It is believed that celebrities tend to enjoy more in public where people show their love and respect for them.
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shoaibyounis wrote:Topic:

Being a celebrity – such as a famous film star or sports personality – brings problems as well as benefits.
Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

Response:

Being a famous personality like Brad Pitt or Steven Gerrard tends to have good as well as bad points. From their point of view, the routine, load and responsibilities make it difficult for them to live their own life. But to the outside world, they appear to enjoy the best and most lavish life style. I believe that being a celebrity has more benefits than problems. For example, they are financially very stable as compared to others. Also, they possess a uniqueness which gives them priority and special treatment in all aspects of life. Both these benefits will be discussed in detail.

It is obvious that most celebrities including film starts and sportsmen have a lot of financial stability. They have multiple investments and a lot of brands pay them to endorse their products. For example, Tiger Woods had an endorsement deal with sports giant “Nike”. The company used to pay him annual fees plus all his sports equipment and gear was free for life. Similar deals add financial stability. But unknown circumstances can result in a broken partnership. Sportsmen can have a negative image because of this.

Similarly, actors and athletes get special treatment in all aspects of life. They are treated as VIPs wherever they go. For instance, front rows are always reserved for celebrities at major events. They do not have to follow the rules or timetable like normal individuals. They can come late and leave early as per their convenience. Hence, it gives them a unique environment and priorities confirming their life style.

It can be clearly observed that the life of a celebrity has more benefits than problems. Famous people get to enjoy a better life style including facilities and strong financial stability. It is believed that celebrities tend to enjoy being in public where people show their love and respect for them.
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