Can someone please review my Letter

[shoaibyounis]

Topic:

You and your family are moving to another country and you are looking for a rented accommodation there.

Write a letter to property agent. In your letter:

- Introduce yourself and your family
- Describe the type of accommodation that you hope to find.
- Give your preferences for the location of the accommodation.

Response:

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to inquire about a rented accommodation in Bahrain for myself and my family.

My name is ABC and I am married with two young children.

We have recently moved from Dubai and are currently looking for a small two story villa with two/three bedroom along with a maid’s room. It would be nice if we can get car park for two vehicles. The place should have a garden as well for my children to play.

It is preferable if the place is close to city center so that my family can go and spend some time in case I get late from office or work during night shifts.

Kindly if you can help me in finding an ideal place for my family.

I look forward to hear from you soon.

Regards,
ABC

[MohammedES]

very good letter man . thank you