please asses my complete mock test.

[Mohammed]

Hello everyone and Ryan,

Please listen to my complete mock test.I have divided into 3 parts and I've tried to act as an examiner and a candidate even it sounds a bit ridiculous:))Would this kind of speaking get me a 7.5 band score?My exam is on this Saturday.

[Mohammed]

part 2

[saqibali]

I am not going to give you full feedback at this time but below are few sugggestionst that can improve your band.
1.Take pauses so that you could be able to collect your words and present a more polished sentences.
2.Add cohesive devices like
I see
You see
But
Since
so
As
although
Additionaly
In addition to this
I think
In effect
In turn
Interestengly
Personally
Fortunately
I think, I belive, Let me see
Rarely
I suppose
3.Add some objective before your nouns.
If you wants to see a practical demonstration of my advice, please check mock speaking samples of ryan on Youtube and practice it.My advice will automaticaly engraved in your mind.

[Mohammed]

part 3

[Mohammed]

Saqibali,thanks for your suggestions:)

[allen_zhang]

I like your accent, sounds clear to me.

some personal suggestions for part 2:
maybe make your story more striking by adding more "band 7" words. try "google" or something else to help you to write a story.

too many "you know what I mean".