Correct my paragraph please

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Correct my paragraph please

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The dwindling of motion that comes from long flight journey may cause some annoying side effects, like Swelling of the lower legs, Joint stiffness, tingling and pain in the muscles in those who have a good health and patient alike. Besides making the journey annoying because of the mentioned side effects, the dwindling of motion could cause those side effects to continue for a long period after arriving to the place you wanted, and that’s will lower the activity of the person.

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