Please, evaluate my IELTS writing task1

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mdzinuk
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Please, evaluate my IELTS writing task1

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Write a brief report on unemployments in England between 1980-1985 as shown in the figure.
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Ans:The graph shows the percentages of unemployed women in Britain from the years 1980 to 1985.It can be clearly seen that maximum women were unemployed in 1982,though, the rates decreased gradually over times going on.

According to the graph, the year 1980 observed 12% unemployment than the year 1981 where the unemployment rate was 14%. Similarly, the picked value was 18%,increased steadily in 1982. After that, the rate collapsed dramatically for the next year.

The women felt more comfortable in job fields for last two years than any others of year while the ratios did not exceeded more than 7%, but a small fluctuation has noticed to reach from 1983 to 1984.

To sum of, England job fields had created better opportunities by time to time and the limit was between 12 to 6 percentages, with an exceptional rare case such as, 18 percent of the year 1983.
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