Could you please rate my essay about traffic and pollution?

[getoveritordie]

Hi all, this is my first post on this forum.
It would be very kind of you to look through my essay and point out the main problems about it. And maybe try to guess a possible band score? Thank you!

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?


For the past several decades the whole world has been very concerned about the increasing amount of pollution problems caused by growing traffic. One of the suggested solutions is to boost the price of petrol so that drivers think twice before choosing to go by car. It is important to note, however, that it would not solve the problem. This essay will present the arguments for this point of view as well as suggest other possible measures to take.

First of all, increasing the price of petrol might introduce even more problems. For example, if using a car placed a high financial burden on ordinary people, driving would be considered to be a luxury. This would inevitably widen the gap between the middle class and the rich. In addition, high prices of petrol would result in the increase of prices of many commodities. This is because their price depends a lot on transportation costs, which would obviously skyrocket if petrol was very expensive. Thus, the proposed solution to high pollution would cause more harm than good.

Fortunately, there are many other ways to solve the pollution problems due to increasing traffic. One of the most effective measures is to actively spread awareness of the impact that traditional cars have on the environment. The more people understand the underlying reasons for global warming induced by human activity, the more action they will take. This action might take the form of using public transportation more frequently or even buying an electric car. Therefore, spreading collective knowledge and awareness is the first step to take in order to limit pollution.

To sum up, radical solutions to global problems, such as increasing the price of petrol to control pollution levels, are not always effective. The most important thing to strive for is international awareness of environmental problems. This way, the human population will thrive rather than die out because of toxic air.

[getoveritordie]

Anyone?

[AP007]

This looks around 6.5 to 7.0


Could you pls rate below as the same topic here

It is true that since last few years, widespread use of vehicles has contributed major role in distributing pollution and traffic. It is agreed that raising a petrol price would definitely wise solution to figure out traffic and pollution issue.
To begin with, availability of vehicle fuel in cheaper rate is the main reason for encouraging people to use more vehicles on the roads. It has been found in the latest research by Indian petroleum department that since they reduced price of petrol due to decrease in crude oil price in International market, people tend to use more vehicles. Thus, it is quite appropriate that if the rate of the fuels made higher would make them restricted on usage of vehicles.

The other effective measures to lower the traffic and pollution issue. Firstly, people are encouraged to use more public transport facility like railway and bus services by providing them easy and cheaper access. Additionally, local authorities should keep pollution free day once in a month when no one allowed to drive vehicles on certain roads or area and allow them to use pollution free vehicles like cycles. For example, In Ahmadabad, local municipal has decided not to allow any vehicles on particular area which is supported by most of the people and as a result there is less traffic and pollution can be seen in that area.

In Conclusion, increase in petrol price will restrict vehicle owners on their usage and other solution like encouraging public transport and observing pollution free day by ban on vehicles would really aid to solve the pollution and traffic problem. It is predicted that Government should take necessary actions to sort out this issue.

[Flick]

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?


For the past several decades the whole world has been very concerned about the increasing number of pollution problems caused by growing traffic. One of the suggested solutions is to boost the price of petrol so that drivers think twice before choosing to travel by car. It is important to note, however, that this would not solve the problem. This essay will present arguments for this point of view as well as suggest other possible measures to take.

First of all, increasing the price of petrol might introduce even more problems. For example, if using a car placed a high financial burden on ordinary people, driving would be considered a luxury. This would inevitably widen the gap between the middle class and the rich. In addition, high petrol prices would result in an increase in the prices of many commodities. This is because their price depends a lot on transportation costs, which would obviously skyrocket if petrol was very expensive. Thus, the proposed solution to high pollution would cause more harm than good.

Fortunately, there are many other ways to solve the pollution problems due to increasing traffic. One of the most effective measures is to actively spread awareness of the impact that traditional cars have on the environment. The more people understand the underlying reasons for global warming induced by human activity, the more action they will take. This action might take the form of using public transportation more frequently or even buying an electric car. Therefore, spreading collective knowledge and awareness is the first step to take in order to limit pollution.

To sum up, radical solutions to global problems, such as increasing the price of petrol to control pollution levels, are not always effective. The most important thing to strive for is international awareness of environmental problems. This way, the human population will thrive rather than die out because of toxic air.

[Flick]

Recently, widespread use of vehicles has had a major role in causing pollution and traffic. It is agreed that raising the petrol price would definitely be a wise solution to figure out traffic and pollution issues.

To begin with, the availability of vehicle fuel at a cheaper rate is the main reason for encouraging people to use more vehicles on the roads. It has been found in recent research by Indian petroleum department that since they reduced price of petrol due to a decrease in crude oil price in the international market, people tend to use more vehicles. Thus, it is quite appropriate that if the rate of the fuels increased, the number of vehicles being used would decrease.

There are other effective measures to lower the traffic and pollution issue. Firstly, people can be encouraged to use more public transport facilities like trains and buses by providing easy and cheap access. Additionally, local authorities should hold pollution-free days once in a month when no one allowed to drive vehicles on certain roads or areas, and instead encourage them to use pollution-free vehicles like cycles. For example, In Ahmadabad, the local municipal has decided not to allow any vehicles in a particular area which is supported by most of the people and as a result, less traffic and pollution can be seen in that area.

In conclusion, an increase in petrol price will restrict vehicle owners in their usage and other solutions like encouraging the use of public transport and observing pollution-free days by banning vehicles would really help to solve the pollution and traffic problem. It is recommended that the government should take necessary actions to sort out this issue.