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rairaichan0323 wrote: Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both these views and give you own opinion.


In a modern society, adolescents often alter their job easily. While some people would argue that employees should work for the one company all their working life, many others would contend that working for dissimilar businesses is favorable for representatives. These points of views will be discussed before arriving at a satisfactory outcome.

On the one hand, some people are of the opinion that they should work at the same company until they retire. A typical example of this is Japanese companies which encourage their staff to remain in the same job for their whole career. It is argued that they completely comprehend the system of the company and also they can present their loyalty to the organization. Thus, it is clear why many people gravitate towards this point of view.

On the other hand, many argue that people should work for different associations in order to seek further development. To illustrate, in Hong Kong young people often change their career in order to gain more working experience and they employ past valuable experience on their present job. Therefore, it is good for the company to employ such workers who have obtained rich knowledge. After analyzing these facts, it is certainly clear why many support this claim.

By way of conclusion, there are strong arguments on both sides. However, after analyzing these points of views, it is clear that staff’s loyalty is a significant key for the successful company. Therefore, I believe that it seems highly advisable for the companies to motivate juveniles to remain working at the same firm.
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rairaichan0323 wrote: It is the government’s responsibility to look after people with problems such as the unemployed and the homeless. Do you agree or disagree?

In a contemporary society, citizens have an obligation to pay taxes to the administration. the government can employ those revenues to provide services to the inhabitants. It is agreed that the local council has a duty to take care of dwellers with difficulties. This argument will be analyzed by looking at how the local council concerns those individuals who have problems can maintain the order of society and improve citizens’ living standards.

First of all, it is an undeniable fact that authority has a responsibility to maintain social order by offering assistance to people with issues. For instance, recently there have been several demonstrations in Hong Kong due to the exorbitant price of housing. This makes it clear that such unsatisfied feelings among the citizens may induce antisocial revolution and considerable influence on the economy. As this shows, in order to maintain stable living circumstances, the local council has an onus to give assistance to those people who are struggling.

Secondly and even more importantly, if the government aids those helpless citizens, it could improve residents’ living standard generally. To illustrate, the Hong Kong council has organized some associations to assist unemployed people to look for work or arrange for homeless people to be accommodated in public houses. Thus, obtaining support from the administration could improve the standard of living for poor people. It is obvious from this that the government has an obligation to help individuals out of destitution.

By way of conclusion, following this look at how the administration can stabilize social order and mend dwellers’ living standard, it has been proven that it indeed has a duty to take care of individuals with difficulties. Also, I believe that it seems highly advisable for the local council to establish more useful measures to assist people.
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Thank you Flick!! could u check this one too? thanks a lot!!

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extend do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

Traffic and contamination issues are continuously growing among the majority of societies. Some people contend that raising the price of petrol is the greatest way to settle these matters. It is disagreed that such a policy would not resolve these problems. To prove this true, looking at how a flexible working and government encouragement can address these difficulties.

Firstly, it is an undeniable fact that an adaptable working can lower the demanding of traffic. As the workers will start to their jobs at dissimilar times. For instance, some organizations in Hong Kong, their workers will commence their work at different times even they are working in the same firm. This makes it clear that the demand of transport at the rush hour will cut down dramatically. As this shows, the flexible working will accurately diminish the traffic problem.

Secondly and even more importantly, though, the local council should induce the people getting on the public transport instead of driving by themselves. To illustrate, the Japan government will support the transport fee to their staffs who are going to work by public transports. Thus, company members will prefer to go to work by public transport. It is obvious from that this encouragement can effectively reduce the burden of traffic and also drop down the amount of carbon dioxide which is produced by cars.

By way of conclusion, following look at this, how the adaptable working and the authorities’ support can tackle the traffic and contamination matters, it is proven that increasing the price of petrol is not the best way to address these issues. Also, it seems highly advisable for the government to draw the public awareness about the drawbacks of the growing traffic and pollution problems.
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Flcik, could u pls help me to check it? thank you very much!!
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rairaichan0323 wrote: Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extend do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

Traffic and contamination issues are continuously growing among the majority of societies. Some people contend that raising the price of petrol is the greatest way to settle these matters. It is disagreed that such a policy would not resolve these problems. This essay will look at how government encouragement can address these difficulties.

Firstly, it is an undeniable fact that an adaptable working (<--Working what? And adaptable petrol price? An adaptable policy? 'working' is a verb, you need a noun here, too.) can lower the demands of traffic as the workers will start to their jobs at dissimilar times. For instance, some organizations in Hong Kong have their workers commence work at different times even though they are working in the same firm. This makes it clear that the demand for transport during rush hour will decrease dramatically. As this shows, flexible working hours will effectively diminish the traffic problem.

Secondly and even more importantly, the local council should encourage people to use public transport instead of driving by themselves. To illustrate, the Japan government supports their staff's transport fees if they travel to work by public transport. Thus, company members prefer to go to work by public transport. It is obvious from this that encouragement can effectively reduce the burden of traffic and also lower the amount of carbon dioxide which is produced by cars.

By way of conclusion, following this look at how adaptable working hours and government support can tackle the traffic and contamination matters, it is proven that increasing the price of petrol is not the best way to address these issues. Also, it seems highly advisable for the government to improve public awareness about the drawbacks of the growing traffic and pollution problems.
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plz check this writing.......give band scores out of 9...i will be highly obliged if somebody could reply as soon as possible ....

Topic:Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world.

What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions.

Answer:: It is indeed a fact that with the advent of falsehood era, crime is increasing drastically linked to imbalance in the society.But,it has become a moot-concern that why this is and there could be some remedies. So, here I am going to scrutinize causes and solutions of this statement in this piece of writing.

As a matter of fact , first and foremost is the unemployment due to rise in population because number of the applicants are more but job vacancies are minimum.Even,over use of technology has replace man-work.Therefore,to fulfil basic needs ,young ones commit crime. For example, statistics reveal that snatching, mugging and so many other crimes are at peak in metro cities which are committed by the either juveniles or youngsters. In addition, both parents in metropolitans are bread-winners because of which it is hard to spend quality time with children as they have hectic schedule and so many daily chores to do.Hence, their offspring get deprived of parents’ guidance and moral values, which lead them to be in the bad society along with getting into malpractices. For instance, brats of rich families are often seen in such problems, quarrles and fights with their peers.

To address this problem, firstly, government must establish small-scale industries in villages, town and large scale in cities so that more and more jobs can be attained by the warm bloods of any country. Secondly, parents must spend some valuable time and understand the needs as well as problems of their children, which may bring them to be on the right path. Such as sitting for some particular time with children by having food, going out, enjoying altogether in weekends.

To conclude, after considering all the above points, I personally believe that mutual efforts of parents, law-makers and individuals need to be put for eradicating this problem from the society.
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