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faty I am reviewing since no one has, but there are better people to review this 1. The first para is missing an outline sentence. ( this essay will be ....) 2. Para 2 It is perceived that employees are most likely to take interest in their jobs ( they will "show" interest ) if they own a ...

I wont go that far few corrections ------------------ Thus, such policy could bring peace and order to the ("a") society. Take, Kentucky, for example, a civilian has ("had") been executed for murdering a family, but after several years the person was found "faultless". ...

Dear Dr.Matthew, Will appreciate if you can check this essay, your feedback to Parms is priceless. I am really not great in grammar. My mentor OnlineEnglishTeacher has taught me few tricks. Param, sorry for using your thread. --------------------------------------------------------------------------...

My take is that your essay went off-topic or in other words, you gave some unnecessary details which were not required. Second, there are some grammatical errors but I am not the best person to help you. Also, you put both pros and cons of both age group teens and adults which make this essay very b...

Bas, I would request to get your writing rechecked. I got my writing remarked in spite everyone advised this, there was a change in my grade but only by 0.5 unfortunately I needed +1 in writing.

thanks

Thanks bas, I will keep that in mind, punctuations mistakes would be a tough bullet to dodge.

Appreciate your comments bas but right now my focus is to minimise grammatical mistakes. In spite of trying hard I tend to make these mistakes, grammar carries 1 pts which become a deciding factor once the writing scores goes beyond 6.5

slave, I have some bad news for you. I am no expert in grammar but I see that your writing has grammar issues just like mine. They will never give you 7.0 for grammatical mistakes.

Please get it corrected by onlineenglishteacher or flick

Flick really appreciate your help. I used to wonder when would you give my essay a try. Thank you for those wonderful corrections.

You may get 6.5 based on your content / topic vocabulary. I see some serious problem in the overall structure of this essay. You need one or two ( prefer one) paragraph for first part of the question ie cause, You need one or two (prefer one) paragraph for the "solution" but what I see tha...

I see that you are making careless spelling mistakes, in one paragraph you wrote "believed" but in the next one "belived". Your score may drop 5.5 because of such mistakes. IELTS instructors are ruthless when it comes to checking . Avoid duplication of words like "criminals ...

I think it's pretty late to give a feedback nevertheless I will do so. I liked overall writing style and depth used in the second paragraph. However, I see you went off topic in the third paragraph or failed to connect the globalization with skills or did not explain how transport makes skills irrel...

Will appreciate if you can give me feedback on topic vocab and grammar. ---------------- Most people are going to universities these days than in the past, they start to work later in life with higher qualification. Do you think this a positive or a negative development ------------ Indubitably, edu...

mozo I liked your essay and the best thing about your essay is your topic vocabulary. I think you would get 6.5 However, I see that you took this essay a little too far by telling about junk food restaurants "Mcdonalds and Burger King", which is not required. I think you can get your essay...

"Break the rules but follow the law. Becoming a good member of the society is a continuous process and it is not a piece of cake either, some excel and others fail." This doesn't sound very academic. This essay is from ielts cambridge book and it has a model answer. Perhaps you should read...

Well, I may not be able to better job that you but I tried so that I can improve :) You have written well. ====================================================================================================== Indubitably, teachers hold a key to a successful and prosperous nation. Without any doubt,...

Pls post the complete question so that one can access if you have deviated from the topic. I may not be able to help you grammar, there are better guys here. ---- For Academic Essay its best to use third man approach. So instead of using I or you used one / people. "If you look at the life of p...

In some cultures, children are expected to follow very strict rules of behaviour. In other cultures, children are allowed to do almost anything they want. What are the merits of each opinion? What is your position on the matter? Include relevant examples in your response. ------------------------ In...

Crystalxu you need to go on 28th no matter what. For Listening test marking is bit lenient. Plus no show won't make things better. Go with no expectation.

I think this is a well-written essay although the style is different, but I liked the topic vocabulary used.

I think if you proofread it you will get it -------------------- life "has" become very busy and "very" stress"ful" specially ("especially") for working people, which affect"s" their opportunity to work out and "to" eat a healthy food (&quo...

Hi All I tried to self-assess my essay to improve on my grammar. Please correct it if I got few things wrong. Some people feel that certain workers like nurses, doctors and teachers are undervalued and should be paid more, especially when other people like film actors or company bosses are paid huge...

I think you may want to check with internet one has to use "the" all the time. You may want to go thru Ryan's video lectures on formulating introduction for a discussion style essay. Besides where is the question ? On the one hand, browsing "the" internet is an easy way to search...

Thank you sandeep2206 for corrections

Thank you ielts_barry for putting all the points, the "topic vocabulary" advice is just too good.

My 2 cents I have not seen a question in Introductory paragraph for an academic style writng. I would probably avoid it. The way I would have written the introduction is like this ( again I am also learning not perfected it ...) Undoubtedly, modern lifestyle demands people to work harder in their jo...