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However, every language should be treated as the wealth of mankind so that countries should shoulder their responsibilities to try to save more dying languages . you should not contradict in the last paragraph what you have argued throughout the essay! Have confidence in your opinion , and argue it...

Hence the need for a standardised education that school can provide, as opposed to families. just noticed, this is not a proper sentence, but a clause . Sentences need at least a subject and a controlling verb. You could say : 'Hence, there is a need for a standardised education that school can pro...

i think you are slightly off-topic - maybe because the question is not clear . Parents reading 'stories' for children is not just about teaching them things , or imparting/acquiring information , but more about family bonding and sharing the excitement and fun of story-telling; also something about ...

i strongly favour the ielt-simon approach - a very short intro , one sentence paraphrasing the topic question/description and one sentence giving your answer /opinion. Everything you write should help you answer the question , and a lengthy background para does not do this , and cannot help you get ...

to ramify is surely incorrect (for now) , although there are such things as ramifications. OP, the model essay discusses environment and resources, but you could consider other negative effects of global consumerism, eg on traditional culture and beliefs , on the diversity of values and ways of life...

the beached whale picture is a good example of the saying : the picture can communicate much more than a thousand word explanation of how, why and where whales get beached, what we need to do etc. Likewise for a photo of a starving child, a polluted river, an innocent man being beaten by police etc ...

i think the task card said 'comic actor ' or 'comic star' or comedian, so that means a real person , not a character in a show or movie. eg Rowan Atkinson , not Mr Bean

try to introduce the essay more simply:
The economic success of many countries has relied on citizens working very long hours. However, I firmly believe this has had a negative impact on the social and family life of these workers.

agree this is not a good answer. Para 2 is about 'poor countries' , but this is not the topic. The Introduction should give some idea of your answer, eg.: Rates of Illiteracy appear to be increasing in some developed and industrialised countries. There may be many reasons for this , but the main one...

this is not an essay about 'school dropouts', but about 'school-leavers' - those who leave school at the regular time , but with a negative attitude to their school experience. Of course many of the reasons are the same - poor teaching methods, too much stress, too many exams. Solutions could be : m...

here are some comments on task 2: you have a strong opinion on this topic , so why not make that clear in the introduction? The instructions do not say : discuss both sides and then give your opinion, and an essay is much more coherent if the position is clear at the beginning. Why ask rhetorical or...

candy07 i would suggest your writing is too formal (unusual for an IELTS candidate, I think). The task 2 answer should not be too academic , but should give your personal opinion . In the IELTS materials the appropriate writing style is described as 'semi-academic'- Solutions such as parental interv...

The first sentence is confusing; say something like : 'People do not always share the same attitude towards the future'. Refute has a special meaning - check it. in your conclusion 'it is believed ' means 'believed by someone ' , not necessarily by you . Better to say : 'I believe'. 'According to me...

not such a good essay , IMO - lots of mistakes and 'ugly ' (non-natural) sentence construction. Why mention globalisation?- I don't think there is any connection . Graduates have always earned more than the average salary , much more so in the past than now. Your 'main reason' is also questionable :...

You shouldn't really begin a sentence with 'Also, ' 'Divert attention away from ' is usually used , rather than 'divert attention towards' : so , 'more sports facilities may divert the public's attention away from pubs, clubs and other entertainment venues where ...'. I strongly suggest you put your...

no grade , just a comment. The question is about multiple serial careers (one after the other) not multiple jobs at the same time (that require multi-tasking), and it is not really because of financial needs or hardship that people do this , but often from choice , or because they have out-dated ski...

hi durai , i don't think task two was so weird , because IELTS exams often have 'child development' and educational type topics, in writing and speaking ('compare children's and adults...'). Anyway , in this type of question , if they give you examples - voting, driving and marrying - you should alw...

I don't think you will face such a big topic in the real IELTS test - maybe they will ask you about one aspect , such as noise pollution , or clean water. Specific comments: 'In recent years' , no 'the' hassle is very informal , used in speech to means 'annoying thing'. Check the meaning of precario...