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by shourien
Wed Jun 04, 2014 12:10 pm
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Essay Practice Task 2 and related question
Replies: 8
Views: 1577

Re: Essay Practice Task 2 and related question

Hello Everyone I happened to come across a question in IELTS cambridge 9, which is as follows: On a recent holiday you lost valuable item. Fortunately you have travel insurance to cover the cost anything you lost. Write letter to manager 1. describe the item 2. How you lost it 3. tell insurance wha...
by shourien
Wed Jun 04, 2014 10:26 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Please put comments On my Task 1 as Iam going for exam on 7
Replies: 5
Views: 1250

Re: Please put comments On my Task 1 as Iam going for exam o

Thanks for your feed back. I really appreciate that you have pointed out my mistakes what necessary steps i can take for the exam of 7th june and please let me know as my target is to achieve 6.5 bands else i have a good reading and listening skills Is it 6.5 in each of the band or overall? Its ver...
by shourien
Sun Jun 01, 2014 1:08 pm
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Could you please correct my Ielts writing task 2
Replies: 3
Views: 1235

Re: Could you please correct my Ielts writing task 2

Thank you so much Shourien. It seems that I have to work on my grammatical problems more, always make silly mistakes. Anyway, I'm a little confused regard on your comment "There is no need for comma after safety "safety, and governments"". The whole sentence is " In my opin...
by shourien
Fri May 30, 2014 2:15 pm
Forum: Latest IELTS questions
Topic: need a partner to prepare for ielts
Replies: 10
Views: 4552

Re: need a partner to prepare for ielts

Hi Shourien, Could you please correct my Ielts writing task 2 that I attached bellow. I'm learning by myself and I usually don't have any feedback on my writing so that I don't know my mistakes at all. I really appreciate it if you could do it for me. Thank a thousand times!! Here is my essay: Thro...
by shourien
Fri May 30, 2014 2:14 pm
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Could you please correct my Ielts writing task 2
Replies: 3
Views: 1235

Re: Could you please correct my Ielts writing task 2

Unfortunately your first sentence does not add up "Human beings have been raised a hope about an ideal society since the early age of human civilization" It could have been better written "Human beings have always hoped to be in an ideal society ever since the early ages of human civi...
by shourien
Fri May 30, 2014 2:07 pm
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Could you please correct my Ielts writing task 2
Replies: 3
Views: 1235

Could you please correct my Ielts writing task 2

Hi Shourien, Could you please correct my Ielts writing task 2 that I attached bellow. I'm learning by myself and I usually don't have any feedback on my writing so that I don't know my mistakes at all. I really appreciate it if you could do it for me. Thank a thousand times!! Here is my essay: Throu...
by shourien
Fri May 30, 2014 12:18 pm
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Hi! I'm new..Pls give me some feedbacks. Thanks!
Replies: 2
Views: 878

Re: Hi! I'm new..Pls give me some feedbacks. Thanks!

Your introduction is weak to some extent. You could have written those 3 sentences as follows to captivate the reader. The first line is a paraphrase of the topic but good enough. "The rise in weight and obesity is a major public health concern. Obesity is a known risk factor for numerous healt...
by shourien
Fri May 30, 2014 9:42 am
Forum: Latest IELTS questions
Topic: need a partner to prepare for ielts
Replies: 10
Views: 4552

Re: need a partner to prepare for ielts

Hi Shourien, I am attempting for IELTS in the month of June. I would hihgly appreciate if you could share your valuable advice on scoring high. Thank you in advance! The way I stated was with Barrons IELTS to focus on tips it had to offer and then read through essays, after which I had a fair idea ...
by shourien
Fri May 30, 2014 9:18 am
Forum: Latest IELTS questions
Topic: need a partner to prepare for ielts
Replies: 10
Views: 4552

Re: need a partner to prepare for ielts

Somnil wrote:Hi Shourien,
Could you provide comments on my writing task 2
That will be a great help.
Can you please show me your work? What is your topic?
by shourien
Fri May 30, 2014 7:11 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Please put comments On my Task 1 as Iam going for exam on 7
Replies: 5
Views: 1250

Re: Please put comments On my Task 1 as Iam going for exam o

It is important that your introduction is more catchy. First of all, "gratitude" is lacking towards your friend. He as offered to help you, look after your pet and your house. In addition, there is no hook in the introduction. Your second paragraph describes things in general but you have ...
by shourien
Fri May 30, 2014 6:18 am
Forum: Latest IELTS questions
Topic: need a partner to prepare for ielts
Replies: 10
Views: 4552

Re: need a partner to prepare for ielts

The best approach to prepare for ielts would be self study for "Listening and Reading" However I would be willing to look at any writing for task 2. I am not an ielts examiner but, I did go through a lot of material before attempting. Probably, I can give some tips. Scores are L-8, R-8.5, ...
by shourien
Fri May 30, 2014 5:58 am
Forum: IELTS related discussion
Topic: Results !
Replies: 7
Views: 1603

Re: Results !

Congrats nilevol. I would say your scores are great.
There is certainly improvement in your writing.
If you feel your Task 2 was good, then I would assume balance would have shifted because of Task 1.
However, both matter if you are aiming at band 7. Hope you had a good letter.