Your essay looks like a fuzzy combination of memorised phrases.
And, your topic sentences and examples don't logically relate to each other.
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- Mon May 26, 2014 12:20 pm
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: ESSAY CHECK
- Replies: 2
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- Fri May 16, 2014 2:37 pm
- Forum: IELTS related discussion
- Topic: Best way to approach Y/N/NG type of questions ?
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Best way to approach Y/N/NG type of questions ?
I am absolutely struggling on this one 
- Fri May 16, 2014 8:21 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: IELTS task 1 writing
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Re: IELTS task 1 writing
In the case of waterways,which was the second most favourable method,the initial amount was nearly 40 million tones, which was peaked to almost 60 million by the end of 1980s,remained a stable position till 1994 and after a slight decrease in 1998,it rose drastically to more than 60 tones in 2002. ...