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Hi there, A very high standard essay. I would just suggest a few writing style points to making the sentences punchier, for example: "That is why, our ancestors emphasized on having food that has a lot of medicinal and nutritional value. " - I would remove 'medicinal and'. "has numero...

Hi there, A reasonably high standard essay. I suggest that you consider using 'comma' more to improve the reading flow of the essay. For example: - ‘unlike cash cards are easy to handle and provide flexibility’ – comma between ‘cash’ and ‘cards’ ‘In addition to that, unlike cash it is easy to keep t...

Hi there, I can follow your logic. You are right that there are grammatical areas (some more the style of writing) scattered throughout, which you should be cautious of, for example: - ‘as the elite sport professionals are very few’, I suggest ‘there are very few elite sporting professionals’ - ‘mor...

Hi there, That's a good letter. A few minor points for your attention: - a vs an. For example: "an rented house", "throwing an party" - Consistent of information. Do we start at 7pm on the dot or around that time? For example: "party around 7 PM", "We start the par...

Hi there, The essay advances your thoughts quite well. Aside from a few minor grammatical/spelling errors, the key thing a few things for you to consider is to increase the variability of how you begin a sentence. Most of your sentences begin with connectors like "Admittedly, ...", "N...

Hi there, That's a good essay. Clear structure with an opening, body, and conclusion. Reasoning is logical and easy to follow. The section that i think has the most opportunity to be improved is this one: "Furthermore, technical glitches can be too costly for any organization and can even force...

Hi there, That's a good article. Lots of 'meat' in the essay and the sentences generally flowed quite well. A few points for you to consider on the writing: - You started the second paragraph with 'Firstly'. Typically, this suggests that you will have 'Secondly', 'Thirdly', 'Lastly' ... etc. There w...

Hi there, The general structure of the essay is there. There are still opportunities for you to improve the essay. A few areas for you to consider are: - Choice of words. In some cases, there are more appropriate word choices. For example, you used 'enormous fields', i would suggest 'a number of fie...