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by lg007
Sat May 30, 2015 11:17 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: please try to view my essay
Replies: 4
Views: 1107

Re: please try to view my essay

I wont go that far few corrections ------------------ Thus, such policy could bring peace and order to the ("a") society. Take, Kentucky, for example, a civilian has ("had") been executed for murdering a family, but after several years the person was found "faultless"....
by lg007
Sat May 30, 2015 11:13 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: please try to view my essay
Replies: 4
Views: 1107

Re: please try to view my essay

csehgal wrote:I am quite certain that this could be a level 8.5 band essay.


Thank you so much for the estimated score csehgal! But ive considered the fact that i still have many corrections which could probably lower my score. Nonetheless, I'm grateful for your helpful response!
by lg007
Sat May 30, 2015 12:29 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: please try to view my essay
Replies: 4
Views: 1107

please try to view my essay

please help me with my essay, i will be taking the exam next week, I'm quite anxious about my writing, i hope anyone could try to comment about my work , thank you in advance! target band score: 7+ Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, a...
by lg007
Tue May 19, 2015 12:49 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Please evaluate my first essay (Academic task 2)
Replies: 2
Views: 995

Re: Please evaluate my first essay (Academic task 2)

hello, Matilda,although i am no expert at this,but I will just provide some suggested corrections that might help: a couple of decades ago it would be much better if you place an end statement that will summarize your ideas in every body paragraph in your conclusion, i think the idea of "not to...
by lg007
Mon May 18, 2015 10:55 pm
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Please Evaluate my First Essay
Replies: 4
Views: 1236

Re: Please Evaluate my First Essay

thank you so much Matilda for your meaningful suggestions, I will try to rephrase my work and apply it for my next essays. :)
by lg007
Mon May 18, 2015 10:44 pm
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Please evaluate my essay (targeting 7 band)
Replies: 5
Views: 1274

Re: Please evaluate my essay (targeting 7 band)

hi, Asadurk,my suggestion in your revised essay would involve english contractions, I think it is safer not to use contractions like "it's for it is , that's for that is", instead write the words in complete format so that it may appear formal for the essay. :)
by lg007
Sat May 16, 2015 1:29 pm
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Can this essay get a band 8?
Replies: 7
Views: 2923

Re: Can this essay get a band 8?

Personally,I have found your work very remarkable. In my humble opinion, although you've placed synonyms, I have noticed that you have used the words "university education" several times,specially, in the intro, I am not expert at this but my suggestion would be, perhaps, to replace some o...
by lg007
Fri May 15, 2015 6:11 pm
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: What do you make of this essay? Target 8+
Replies: 2
Views: 1372

Re: What do you make of this essay? Target 8+

What a great essay you have , you have given specific examples relevant to the topic and have used complex sentence structures and vocabulary words that are quite sophisticated, I wish i could make such an essay as this good. From my modest perspective, you might reach the target band score with thi...
by lg007
Fri May 15, 2015 5:26 pm
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Please Evaluate my First Essay
Replies: 4
Views: 1236

Re: Please Evaluate my First Essay

Thank you very much terry3218 for these suggested corrections! This will be a great help for my next essays .. I'm looking forward for other member's opinion regarding my work :)
by lg007
Fri May 15, 2015 4:52 pm
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Please Evaluate my First Essay
Replies: 4
Views: 1236

Please Evaluate my First Essay

hello, everyone! I am a new member here. I would like to request the experts and other members to please evaluate my first essay and estimate the possible band score if possible. Thank You so much in advance! :) Some parents allow their teenage children to live independently, away from home. Other p...