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This is not really written as an essay - just a list of points. Also, it is MUCH too short!

All the best,
David

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Overall, a good report. All main points are included and the overview/summary is good and clear.

All the best,
David

Hello! As soon as I see the word 'undeniable', I know an essay is going to be fun! Are children taught to be competitive with other children? Which country are you talking about? And if it's such a drawback, why is it considered to be a "great asset"? What is a "practical oriented era...

Hello! Introduction - You cannot be sure that both sides are correct! First main paragraph - There's a big jump from earning to knowing what major to study. This jump makes no sense. Second main paragraph - longing to expend his plethora amount of time??? implementing his obligations??? Conclusion -...

Hello! The basic arguments are valid, though you do make the classic error or confusing pre-prepared food with unhealthy food, which is not always true. Grammar and vocabulary are generally good. The only other issue is that the main paragraphs are quite short and lack development. All the best, David

Hello! I'm always skeptical of the 'more awareness' argument. I mean, is there any adult in the developed world who has not heard of global warming? No? Then that kinda destroys your first main paragraph. Cleaning up plastic will do nothing - nothing! - to combat global warming. Hence, both main par...

Hello! A lot of this essay doesn't make sense. The first paragraph is completely contradicted by the conclusion, so which is true or correct? The second main paragraph doesn't really answer the question. The ranges of grammar and vocabulary are the main problems. Ideas are expressed very simply, wit...

Hello! Overall, a reasonable essay. The points are clear, though you tend to the extreme. Perhaps the purpose of the entry fee is PARTIALLY to cover costs. Vocabulary is good with some topic-specific items. Points have some development and good examples. Grammatical range is limited, though accuracy...

Hello! Fluency - Quite a lot of pauses. Speech is often quite slow as a result Coherence - Good use of a range of connectives Vocabulary - Not much detail in the answers. There is also a contradiction between some answers, e.g. sharing personal problems, so meaning is unclear Grammar - Good basic gr...

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The conclusion is not personal ... and is actually not very clear, particularly since it completely dismisses the points made in the first main paragraph.

Grammar tends to be simple and use of conditionals, modals and adverbs is limited.

All the best,
David

Hello! revere? outraced? You do not mention enough of the data, so there is a lack of detail. However, you have got the main trends. The range of grammar is limited (although you have correctly used the past tense!). Overall, reasonable, but more detail and a wider range of grammar would make this a...

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Drugs and medicines ARE tested on people.

Overall, not bad, but some sentences are very long and would be clearer if divided into shorter ones. some vocabulary is used incorrectly, but generally meaning is clear.

All the best,
David

Hello! The introduction is only a little shorter than the main paragraphs. This indicates that the main paragraphs are not well-developed. The argument about crime may be valid, but it doesn't really explain why people would still expose themselves to it by working in cities. It also doesn't relate ...

Hello! I think the key thing to note is that you have not referred in detail to any other forms of success apart from at work. In the first paragraph, you seem to be focusing on a very select group of people. Do you mean that everyone who doesn't achieve fame is a failure? I don't think that vocabul...

Hello! Fluency - Quite slow speech with a lot of pauses Coherence - Good use of connectives Vocabulary - Quite simple without many details. For instance, it's not clear what this person does or talks about Grammar - Good basic grammar with some complex structures Pronunciation - Generally clear, but...

Hello! What a great question! The second main paragraph is significantly shorter than the first and the conclusion is too short, particularly compared to the introduction. The Norwegian example is completely untrue. 5 million Norwegians could not possibly reduce their emissions by 50% by only using ...

Hello! The introduction is rather long, especially in relation to the conclusion. Similarly, the first main paragraph is much shorter than the second. Ideas are good with some nice development. Vocabulary and grammar are good both in terms of range and accuracy. Overall, a good essay. All the best, ...

Hello! Great question! Great spelling mistake in the first sentence! (mad an impression) It is agreed ...? Who by? Very good arguments and examples in the main paragraphs. I think that you should mention why some people oppose such a move, however. Vocabulary and grammar are good, but a wider range ...

Hello! The second main paragraph is much longer than the first! The main point in the second paragraph is very good, but poorly explained. For example, you mention commerce, then suddenly (in the same sentence!) switch to travel. Then you mention the skyline, but without explanation. Vocabulary and ...

Hello! Not a bad essay, but there are some problems that need to be dealt with. First, your arguments are often assertions with little or no evidence. Car use DID drop slightly during the oil crisis of the 70s, but that was mainly due to fuel shortages. Car ownership did NOT drop. In Europe, petrol ...

Hello! This is a good essay. I like the second point, though I'm not sure how true it is! (Perhaps a university could do a study!?) You don't look at the opposing view, for which there is much evidence, and that is the key problem with the essay. Vocabulary, grammar and organisation are all very goo...

Hello! Fluency - Not many pauses. Good speed. Coherence - Very good range of connectives used correctly, e.g. even after ... Vocabulary - Very good with some interesting examples and details. Grammar - Very good basic grammar. Some complex structures used well. Pronunciation - Very good. Clear with ...

Hello! The first main paragraph is good, but the second contains a few key problems. The point about contributing to the system is unclear. As you mention, 'free' health care is paid from taxes, so most people do actually contribute. If they DON'T pay the extra cost, they DON'T feel the burden??? Th...

Hello! The range and accuracy of grammar is reasonable to some extent. However, a greater variety, particularly conditionals, would make your arguments clearer (more later). The range of vocabulary appears reasonable, but I don't think that you have really used it to create a convincing argument. Qu...

Hello! Basically, quite a good essay. Your point about jobs is often cited with regard to this topic, but it actually doesn't stand up in reality. According to your argument, Japan should have massive unemployment and crime. It doesn't. With regard to grammar, you tend to use 'will' rather than more...