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Hello! This is a good report. you have included enough data and made some good comparisons and used fractions to express proportions. There is some very good vocabulary (minor proportion, exploited) and grammar is good with relatively few errors. Organisation is clear with some good use of connectiv...

Hello! Capital letters for Sir and Madam. The letter is clear and you have included all three points, as required. Vocabulary is good. Grammar is also good (past tense!) and there are not many mistakes. There really is some good phrasing here - Despite complaining repeatedly ..., I expect a full ref...

Hello! This is actually a good essay! Points are clear and developed. Vocabulary is very good (ideological, fanatic, harsh) and there is a good range of grammar, despite many errors. In the conclusion, there is a glaring error. you state that the rights of the victim are paramount, but the victim is...

Hello! The only real problem - and unfortunately, it's a BIG one - is that you haven't included enough of the statistical information. This is necessary when only a limited amount of data (12 in this case) is in the diagrams. Vocabulary is good, and would be better if more data was included, I'm goi...

Hello! You have put the solution together with the conclusion - they must be separated. Ideas are reasonable, though standard. I'm not sure that the point about absorption is correct. Vocabulary is good. Grammar is a little weak. There are numerous errors, some basic (One of the possibilities are .....

Hello! I have just watched the latest episode of 'Sherlock', so what an appropriate letter! This is a good letter. All points have been answered and developed clearly. vocabulary is good in both range and accuracy. The weakness is grammar - though not bad, there is a limited range and quite a lot of...

Hello! Your conclusion is not expressed as a personal opinion, although your opinion is quite clear. Some of your points are unclear, largely because you failed to use modals or suitable adverbs. For instance, you say that celebrities can do what they like, then say that they constantly have their p...

Hello! Fluency - Very good speed. Not many pauses in part 1, but quite a lot in parts 2 and 3 Coherence - Very good use of connectives Vocabulary - not afraid of hard work, good at meeting deadlines Grammar - Good basic grammar and a variety of complex structures Pronunciation - Clear with some into...

Hello! It's not blowing my mind. The argument in the first main paragraph is unclear/invalid. If few male/female students choose a subject, this will be reflected in fewer female/male students being accepted also, to keep numbers equal. However, the last sentence is true. As for the second main para...

Hello! First main paragraph - I'm not sure that electronic communications are more numerous than face-to-face ones, at work or otherwise. This paragraph doesn't really contain an argument and reads more like an introduction. Second main paragraph - What is mediated communication? Once again, I take ...

Hello! Introduction - Good First main paragraph - I'm not sure about 'electrifying' and 'sedentary rooting in a square box', but the basic idea is reasonable, though it could be more developed. Second main paragraph - I think that you need to be more specific. Given that either one religion is corre...

Hello! An interesting question! Overall, this is a good essay. your points are quite basic, but valid, and you have developed them to some extent. I like the fact that you have looked at the issue from the point of view of the employers, but I think that you could have pointed out that employers oft...

Hello! This essay is good ... until the conclusion! You have failed to include your own opinion. We can also see that in the introduction you write 'conclude by stating ITS opinion'. The essay has no opinion - the writer does. This is a big mistake and will reduce the band score significantly. The a...

Hello! As soon as I read the question statement, I thought - 'Challenge! Challenge! Challenge!' The question statement is completely false. The world is very clearly moving towards paid education and health services! Introduction - At no cost??? So who pays??? Taxpayers, my friend!!! You seem to hav...

Hello! Introduction - Your claim that in some countries children have 'liberty' needs to be made clear (not necessarily in the introduction) especially because it is not clear whether you mean total or partial liberty. As far as I know, parents in all countries impose rules on their kids. 'Lovely' a...

Hello! Use of the word 'exponential' is incorrect. I don't think that you have organised the report well. Jumping between Sweden and the USA causes comprehension problems if the grammar and vocabulary are not used very well. I think that you could also develop your description of the lines. For the ...

Hello! Do you really think that it is the messages on the cigarette packages and NOT the well-publicised science that has 'led to the belief'? In the introduction, you have clearly misunderstood the question! It's not about the right to smoke, but about the right to smoke where there are other peopl...

Hello! Overall, not bad, but there are two key problems. First, you haven't included the second chart in your summary. Secondly, I think that you could have included more information in your report. There are not many pieces of data in the two charts. There are quite a lot of grammatical errors, but...

Hello! An interesting question! I don't think that you have really answered the question. There is nothing in the conclusion about the relative importance of price compared with the other (valid) factors that you have mentioned. Your ideas need development, rather than just mentioning each and then ...

Hello! The description of the map is good, but the description of the possible locations of the supermarket requires development. Perhaps you could add a comparison of the two locations? The range of grammar is narrow and you miss some great opportunities to make good sentences with clauses, e.g. .....

Hello! You've fallen into a big trap in the first main paragraph. You seem to be making points about people moving from (e.g.) Bangladesh to (e.g.) the USA. However, as this is not clearly mentioned, we can also assume from your writing that people are moving from the USA to Bangladesh in order to h...

Hello! The introduction is as long as the main paragraphs. Regular followers of my comments will know what to expect ... First main paragraph - First sentence - why/how? (Although the use of 'can' and 'potential' here makes the statement so vague as to be meaningless!) Second sentence - is that real...

Hello! First main paragraph - you need to suggest how companies can do this and how they lead to greater productivity. Second main paragraph - Is it indisputable? Life in the past for many people was pretty bad. No incentives? Really? Delegate responsibility and workforce equally? Third main paragra...

Hello! Many people think ... In the first main paragraph, there is a sudden jump to 'hatred'. In the second main paragraph, change 'co-operate/co-operation' to 'compete/competition' and there's no real difference. This suggests that your argument is weak at best. The conclusion makes no sense. To su...

Hello! An interesting question, but probably too general for IELTS. Anyway .... The incident you mention in the first main paragraph is actually quite common. It's happened to me twice. Still, it's a good example. I think the example you give in the second main paragraph is good. However, this illus...