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Near perfect, in my opinion.

Well done
David

Hello! Oh, I don't like that introduction. I think you got the first sentence wrong. The first part of the second sentence too. Creators or creations? Advancement? Ducks and rabbits clean up after disasters??? The fail of the Chinese? Overall, the range and accuracy of grammar and vocabulary is very...

Hello! This essay is a bit of a mess. There are a LOT of unsubstantiated assertions. You need to provide support and evidence, not simply state your opinion as unsupported fact. 1. Introduction - Throughout history, women have worked. The idea that women working is something new is compete rubbish. ...

Hello! Not a bad essay, but you need to provide support for your main ideas. It seems to me that you are merely making assumptions - older and younger people work differently and managers are primarily for making changes. I would challenge both of these assumptions. Regardless, of our different opin...

Hello! Nice question! I think that you have made a big error in the first main paragraph. Natural disasters do not discriminate. Your home is not damaged less because you are richer. The second main paragraph includes the classic arguments. It would have been nice to include some reasons why some pe...

Hello! Overall, a good essay. Your points are clear with some development. However, I think that you could have reduced the number of points and developed the remaining ones more. For example, do you need an hour to travel because Zagreb is so big or because there are too many cars? If having a car ...

Hello! Basically, this is a good essay. I think that your points are good, but could be better developed with some specific examples or with suggestions on integrating technology into the learning. Vocabulary is good, despite some mistakes, e.g. updated. The range of grammatical structures is a litt...

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Basically, this is a good essay. Points are reasonable and developed to some extent. I think that you could improve the development by looking at areas where gender balance might be improved.

Grammar and vocabulary are good enough, but there are a lot of errors.

All the best,
David

Hello! I think that you have mixed up tourism and immigration. The environmental aspect may be true, but you haven't really separated it from general economic development and you haven't related it to international understanding. Vocabulary and grammar are not used to provide a good answer to the qu...

Hello! Great question! I'm afraid your arguments are very weak. In the first paragraph, your statistics are confusing. 10% women and 85% men = 95%. Where's the other 5%? Or do you mean that 85% of all men achieve high positions, which is demonstrably untrue? In the second main paragraph, you say tha...

Hello! There are two quite big problems with the arguments you have presented. First, you haven't compared learning at primary and secondary school. Second, you say it depends on the children's choices. Really? I honestly cannot think of an example of where children make their own education choices....

Hello! Introduction as long as the first main paragraph :roll: Well, you have answered the question, but it's a little disappointing that the only reasons are 'work'. Vocabulary is good, but you need to work on the grammar. There is a limited range of structures and mistakes are common - even basic ...

Hello! This is a fantastic question! Love it - gonna use it in class! In the first main paragraph, you focus on earthquakes. Whilst there may be a connection with global warming, I guarantee it's not one of the key issues, especially from the point of view of environmentalists. This kinda renders th...

Hello! Overall, a very good letter. You have answered the three points and included some details. (I'm sure everyone wants to know what's in that box!?) Grammatical range and accuracy are both good, though the use of the future tense is a little unusual. Vocabulary is used well and with some precisi...

Hello! Forgive my frustration, but the fact that I have mentioned long introductions numerous times recently, plus the fact that you have written an introduction as long as your main paragraphs, is the perfect illustration of the saying 'some people never learn'! In your main paragraphs, you introdu...

Hello! Introduction - It is strongly disapproved ... Who by? I don't understand the second sentence First main paragraph - I understand the words, but I don't understand how they relate to the question Second main paragraph - Same as the first main paragraph Conclusion - ??? I honestly don't underst...

Hello! Recently, I have noticed that a lot of contributors are making awful mistakes with their examples and evidence. Don't make stuff up! Get your facts correct! The British Museum is FREE! (And an archaeological society would almost certainly not be paying for such research!) I also disagree with...

Hello! Merits and demerits? I honestly have NEVER heard a native speaker use that phrase. According to me? You mean 'In my opinion' Ah! Now I give you credit for actually mentioning particular fields of work ... BUT you only mention them in the conclusion, without explaining why these jobs are good ...

Hello! Overall, quite good, but check the minimum for LA and in Calcutta 'because the minimum is 30' is incorrect. You've just managed to go over the minimum word requirement and this can be seen in the 'quick' way in which you cover the data. Not all the data is mentioned. However, grammar is reaso...

Hello! Overall, quite a good essay, but there are some fundamental errors that would adversely affect your score. 1. The introduction is as long as the 2 main paragraphs! AGAIN!!! I'm going to have to ask Ryan's permission to start handing out punishments to contributors who do this - I have mention...

Hello! Overall, this is a good essay. I particularly liked the first main paragraph where you introduce key points with some development. I think that the second main paragraph is a little weaker because you do not develop the points so well, listing them instead. Just my personal opinion, but I thi...

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I cannot see the chart, so I'll just assume the figures are correct.

This looks to me like a very good report with a clear summary and good grammar and vocabulary, despite some minor errors that do not affect meaning.

David

Hello! First, a few obvious points. 1. The introduction is much longer than the first main paragraph. 2. The second main paragraph is WAY longer than the first. 3. The productivity of online workers is TEN TIMES greater!?!?!? Any company that doesn't send its workers home immediately must be stupid!...

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A very good letter!

David

Hello! Introduction - Well, considering that many kids do sports in their free time already ... but let's see how this develops. First main paragraph - Are these kids more intelligent and creative because they learn foreign languages or do they learn foreign languages better because they are more in...