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Hello! Hazardous materials? The solution - Well, for IELTS T2 this is an acceptable solution, but it's not that good. I teach a lot of teenagers and they all - 100% - know that fast food is unhealthy. So, is more education the answer? (By the way, I couldn't find your 'statistics' online and I suspe...

Hello! This is a good essay. Your points are clear and well supported. I think that you could have reasserted them briefly in the conclusion, but that's a minor point. Vocabulary is very good throughout the essay (e.g. natural calamities, avante garde, corporate leaders, accomplishing these goals - ...

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This is a very good essay. Points are clear and supported. Vocabulary and grammar are very good, with relatively few errors. Make sure that you mention which city you are referring to (District 2?). Organisation of paragraphs and within paragraphs is very good - very clear.

Well done!
David

Hello! A reasonable essay, but you only get to the core issue in the conclusion, i.e. too late! Which sorts of work is it appropriate for children to do? What age should the children be? These are the points that will distinguish an average essay from a good or very good one. Vocabulary is good and ...

Hello! Overall, this is a good essay. Points are clear and developed with examples. Vocabulary and grammar are both good, though the range of both is a little limited and there are mistakes. However, these mistakes do not interfere with meaning. Organisation of the overall essay and the main paragra...

Hello! First main paragraph - No foreign language learning in German schools????? Foreign language learning does increase the study load - ask any student!!! Second main paragraph - I couldn't find the survey online and suspect it is bogus. Bilingual students are likely to achieve better language sc...

Hello! You haven't really explained why you hold the opinion expressed in the conclusion. The language used in the two main paragraphs does not express exact meaning. You say that it is the government's responsibility, then you say it the individual's. Which one is it? (You haven't used key words li...

Hello! It depends on what score you are aiming for. Each examiner marks a lot of papers, so templates are easily spotted. Most candidates are aiming for 6/6.5 so using a template is generally fine for them, but if you are aiming higher, I'd avoid them. Most candidates make the mistake of using the t...

Hello! The main paragraphs are reasonable, but the conclusion doesn't actually answer the question (although the question is so easy and the answer so obvious!). However, as the main paragraphs are good, with clear examples and good grammar and vocabulary, this essay is not too bad. Just change that...

Hello! Introduction - "It is agreed ..." Who by? First main paragraph - This is so general that it makes no sense. What are 'social behaviour cases'? Oxford university government does not exist. You seem to be suggesting that online activity is the only reason for bad behaviour, which I th...

Hello again! Overall, a reasonable essay - certainly not bad! The essay is just over 250 words and there does not seem to be much detail. In addition, some points are repeated (last sentence of the first main paragraph) instead of introducing supporting evidence, such as why parents are not able to ...

Hello! This is a very good essay. Your points are clear and you use good qualifiers and modal verbs. There is a good range of grammar structures and vocabulary. There are mistakes, but these do not affect meaning. Paragraphing and use of connectives are also very good. There's really nothing I can r...

Hello! athletics coach cheerleader (one word) inauguration? Basically, those are just a few minor vocabulary errors. The only real mistake is that you haven't said when you are free until. Overall, good grammar and vocabulary, both in terms of range and accuracy. There are mistakes, but they do not ...

Hello! You don't really explain why a good working atmosphere is important, e.g. how it impacts on health. Job satisfaction can be achieved. I have achieved it with some of the jobs that I have done in my life. It would be nice to see some suggestions about how job satisfaction might be achieved, th...

Hello! Introduction - ascent? dominance? harnessing? First main paragraph - Isn't a library supposed to be quiet place? (Maybe that's changed since I was at uni!). Second main paragraph - Well, you are fully entitled to your own opinion, but I would point out that if the scientific evidence is again...

Hello! Fluency - Speech is a little fast. This has an adverse effect on pronunciation. Coherence - Good use of connectives. Vocabulary - Good. All questions answered with good details. Grammar - Reasonable basic grammar with some good complex structures. Be wary of basic errors like plurals. Pronunc...

Hello! Overall, not a bad essay, but there are some things that would make it better. 1. Be careful with vocabulary - e.g. implied (applied?) 2. In most countries people are already taught about nutrition. If this is not true in your country, you should make this clear. 3. People are often not wise ...

Hello! This is a very good essay. Points are clear with some good development. Vocabulary and grammar are very good, both in terms of range of structures and accuracy. I like that the conclusion includes some stipulations along with your opinion. Any mistakes are minor and have little effect on mean...

Hello! Fluency - Quite a lot of pauses and speech is quite slow Coherence - Good use of a range of connectives Vocabulary - Reasonable with some details Grammar - Good basic grammar with some good complex structures Pronunciation - Clear, but almost no stress and intonation Overall, I would suggest ...

Hello! Overall, a good essay, but the main ideas have not been sufficiently developed. The longest part of the essay is the introduction, which should be shorter than the main paragraphs. Vocabulary and grammar are very good, with regard to both range and accuracy, and this is what would result in a...

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This is a good letter. The second and third points are covered and vocabulary and grammar are good both in terms of accuracy and range. However, the first point is not well covered - it's just a watch! You can buy watches for $10.

Always be sure to give details!

All the best,
David

Hello! The project gets delayed foo over a month because someone was away for a week? The argument about service is invalid as the vast majority of customers will pass the job on to another person without problems. The second main paragraph is good. Overall, a mixed essay. The first half is weak but...

Hello! The first sentence of the introduction doesn't make sense - even if it has no positive effects? And the second sentence is confusing. First main paragraph - Yes, but any activity that requires people to look at something for a long time, e.g. reading, can hurt the eyes. This is a problem that...

Hello! Great question! The main paragraphs are too short. Reduce the number and/or develop the ones that remain, particularly the third. However, your points are good. Grammatical range is limited and there are quite a lot of basic errors, but points can still be understood fairly easily. Vocabulary...

Hello! Not a bad essay, but not really that good either. Your points are good, but not well-developed. For instance, you say that people should put health first, but most people do not. You could also explain what you mean in the last sentence of the first main paragraph. Why should leisure faciliti...