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- Sat Nov 14, 2015 5:24 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Please check this essay!
- Replies: 1
- Views: 447
Re: Please check this essay!
Hi Wayfarer! Introduction - "it is totally agreed" - no, it isn't! Plenty of people do not think that this issue is as serious or important as other problems facing humanity. The Chinese purposely allowed pollution levels to rise in order to facilitate economic growth. Evidence suggests th...
- Sat Nov 14, 2015 2:26 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Essay Evaluation Task 2 Writing
- Replies: 2
- Views: 820
Re: Essay Evaluation Task 2 Writing
Hello Owais,
The introduction is a little long, but still good. The main paragraphs contain good arguments, clearly expressed. The conclusion is fine, although I'm not sure about 'dug'.
Overall, very good grammar and vocab.
Well done!
David
The introduction is a little long, but still good. The main paragraphs contain good arguments, clearly expressed. The conclusion is fine, although I'm not sure about 'dug'.
Overall, very good grammar and vocab.
Well done!
David
- Sat Nov 14, 2015 2:18 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Essay Assessment for Task 2 Writing
- Replies: 3
- Views: 910
Re: Essay Assessment for Task 2 Writing
Hi Owais,
It's up to you - both are fine.
David
It's up to you - both are fine.
David
- Sat Nov 14, 2015 2:06 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Essay evaluation
- Replies: 13
- Views: 4684
Re: Essay evaluation
Hello Vishwa, Introduction - This doesn't exactly relate to the question, i.e. the allocation of a proportion of high positions to women isn't mentioned. First main paragraph - Good Second main paragraph - Also good, but I suggest extending the argument a little. Conclusion - No major problems. Over...
- Sat Nov 14, 2015 2:00 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Kindly assess my writing thnx.
- Replies: 3
- Views: 533
Re: Kindly assess my writing thnx.
Hello! Why is it not debatable? The rest of the essay does not relate to the question. The death penalty has not been demonstrated to be a deterrent. In fact, countries with the death penalty (USA) often have higher rates of violence than those that do not have it (Canada). Grammar is good, but this...
- Fri Nov 13, 2015 6:44 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Please evaluate my Essay
- Replies: 2
- Views: 447
Re: Please evaluate my Essay
Hello, Harris! Introduction - Nowadays! Is it agreed? Not in China, India, Indonesia, Brazil, Nigeria, Pakistan, Saudi Arabia ... Need I continue?! First main paragraph - Whoops! I am a male and therefore am unable to give birth! The second sentence does not prove the third. The fourth sentence seem...
- Fri Nov 13, 2015 6:24 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Essay evaluation
- Replies: 13
- Views: 4684
Re: Essay evaluation
Hi Vishwa, This is reasonable, except that you haven't really explored alternatives very much, or really said why (or which type of) written tests work well. For example, when you talk about written tests, do you mean essays, multiple choice questions, short answer questions? Why do the combined wri...
- Fri Nov 13, 2015 6:15 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Please Assess my Essay
- Replies: 1
- Views: 424
Re: Please Assess my Essay
Hello! Introduction - Good. First main paragraph - attributed to means caused by or created by. Otherwise good. Second main paragraph - Ah, now it's clear that you have missed the point! You've missed the words 'a lot' from the statement. Conclusion - Doesn't really answer the question. (See paragra...
- Fri Nov 13, 2015 6:08 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Essay Assessment for Task 2 Writing
- Replies: 3
- Views: 910
Re: Essay Assessment for Task 2 Writing
Hello again, Owais! Introduction - Well, i'm going to be little 'picky' and say that few people spend MOST of their adult lives in the workplace, despite what many people claim. Similarly, here in East Asia, students constantly claim that they spend so much time studying, but actually they usually d...
- Fri Nov 13, 2015 5:55 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Hi, Please Evaluate my Essay
- Replies: 1
- Views: 377
Re: Hi, Please Evaluate my Essay
Hello Owais! Introduction - Nice! Main paragraphs - Very good! I think a few specific examples would help. Conclusion - As with many (most?) T2 essays posted here recently, you fail to make the conclusion a personal one. Bear in mind that the question clearly asks you the extent to which YOU agree o...
- Fri Nov 13, 2015 5:44 am
- Forum: Post your exam experience and/or results
- Topic: EOR and Retest Advice
- Replies: 2
- Views: 10280
Re: EOR and Retest Advice
Hello!
I generally do not recommend my students get an EOR, as it costs half the price of a test and is likely to return negative. No, they do not check if you are taking the test again in the future or if you have taken it any other time in the past.
All the best,
David
I generally do not recommend my students get an EOR, as it costs half the price of a test and is likely to return negative. No, they do not check if you are taking the test again in the future or if you have taken it any other time in the past.
All the best,
David
- Thu Nov 12, 2015 3:15 am
- Forum: IELTS related discussion
- Topic: Please....Need help on speaking section
- Replies: 6
- Views: 6115
Re: Please....Need help on speaking section
Hi Rahul, Well, there WILL be a time limit, but probably they will not be so strict if you exceed it a little. The main effects will be to allow you time to get more vocabulary and grammar into your answers. I would advise you to practice making points clearly, so that the influence of your stammer ...
- Thu Nov 12, 2015 3:10 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Please check this essay! Thank you in advance!
- Replies: 2
- Views: 1157
Re: Please check this essay! Thank you in advance!
Hello again! Introduction - I'm not sure that shopping has been a necessary evil and the people shopping might just be happy generally. First main paragraph - This is a little difficult to understand. I don't think we can really criticise people for concentrating on shopping when they are shopping. ...
- Thu Nov 12, 2015 2:59 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Please assess my essay)
- Replies: 1
- Views: 500
Re: Please assess my essay)
Hello Wayfarer! Introduction - Long, but good. First main paragraph - Very general, but otherwise no major flaws. Second main paragraph - Quite good, with an interesting example, although the link between the fiction story and real life is not illustrated, i.e. the fact that the plot of the film was...
- Thu Nov 12, 2015 2:51 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: please assess my ielts writing task 2
- Replies: 3
- Views: 695
Re: please assess my ielts writing task 2
Hi Fasah, Generally, use referencing words such as he/she/it/they/these/those - or even 'we' - throughout the essay (T2), but remember that the conclusion should present a personal opinion, so use 'I' there. Try not to use the same referencing words all the time, but some repetition is inevitable. A...
- Thu Nov 12, 2015 2:48 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Please assess my writing and give possible band score. My exam is on 5th december.
- Replies: 1
- Views: 461
Re: Please assess my writing and give possible band score. My exam is on 5th december.
Hi Doni, Introduction - Good, but the last sentence is not well-phrased. First main paragraph - Very good! Second main paragraph - Also good! Conclusion - Change 'nob' to 'job'! Personalise the conclusion a little. Overall - Good arguments and good use of vocabulary. Some grammatical errors, but gen...
- Wed Nov 11, 2015 3:43 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Essay evaluation
- Replies: 13
- Views: 4684
Re: Essay evaluation
Hello Sindu,
The use of abbreviations is not encouraged, but some are acceptable, e.g., etc., i.e.
David
The use of abbreviations is not encouraged, but some are acceptable, e.g., etc., i.e.
David
- Wed Nov 11, 2015 3:42 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Essay evaluation
- Replies: 13
- Views: 4684
Re: Essay evaluation
Hi Vishwa, Basically, the organisation is clear. Be a little careful with some vocabulary and facts ... 1. business people do not have to travel by air 2. change 'attain' to 'gain' (re taxes) 3. you don't say why increasing tax will not work 4. I don't think that aviation fuel causes the ozone hole ...
- Wed Nov 11, 2015 3:32 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: please assess my ielts writing task 2
- Replies: 3
- Views: 695
Re: please assess my ielts writing task 2
Hello Fasah, You'll be pleased to hear that I think this is a very good essay! I think that you have picked up on the 2 main arguments and provided good examples. Vocabulary is both of a high standard and clear. You might want to check your essay for some basic mistakes and/or cut down the length of...
- Tue Nov 10, 2015 10:51 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Security: Step by Step Rayen's method
- Replies: 1
- Views: 542
Re: Security: Step by Step Rayen's method
Hello! It would be useful to have the question, because there have been several on this topic, each slightly different. Anyway, let's go through each paragraph ... Introduction - Try to personalise the intro a little, i.e. modify "it is believed" and "this will be proven". First ...
- Tue Nov 10, 2015 10:38 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Essay evaluation
- Replies: 13
- Views: 4684
Re: Essay evaluation
Hi Vishwa, Introduction - "it is a deniable fact" - Then is it really a fact? "plays a vital ROLE". "may or may NOT be" First main paragraph - A few interesting ideas, but they could be more developed, or you could reduce the number of points and explain those in detail...
- Tue Nov 10, 2015 10:26 am
- Forum: IELTS related discussion
- Topic: Asking for a score re-mark: When is it worth it?
- Replies: 2
- Views: 1933
Re: Asking for a score re-mark: When is it worth it?
Hello!
If you don't think that your ideas were so good, I'd suggest re-taking the test rather than getting a re-mark.
David
If you don't think that your ideas were so good, I'd suggest re-taking the test rather than getting a re-mark.
David
- Mon Nov 09, 2015 3:43 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Plz assess my writing
- Replies: 2
- Views: 1548
Re: Plz assess my writing
Hello! Introduction - "I don't believe that people will not go ..." That double-negative is a little messy! Main paragraph - This needs to be divided into at least 2 paragraphs. 'Nevertheless' might make a good break. Conclusion - Short and sweet! Overall, I think that you make some good p...
- Mon Nov 09, 2015 3:36 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: writing task2 agree/disagree opnion essay1
- Replies: 2
- Views: 4294
Re: writing task2 agree/disagree opnion essay1
Hello! Let's go through paragraph by paragraph. Introduction - Quite good. First main paragraph - I'm not sure about some of the phrasing, e.g. "very dangerous" and "they are not mature enough to learn good and bad of life". Are these really true? Second main paragraph - How is c...
- Mon Nov 09, 2015 1:08 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Essay evaluation
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1375
Re: Essay evaluation
Hi Vishwa, Introduction - Good. I like the mention of people below the poverty line. First main paragraph - At the 'gross' level? A few good examples - nice! Second main paragraph - There's that word 'moot' again, used incorrectly! :evil: The issue of corruption is true, but can be applied in any si...