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Hi Vishwa,
The letter is REALLY good!
I think the essay is good, but you could just add a little more to each of the main paragraphs. Giving examples from your country is a good way to do this.
All the best,
David

Hi!
The report is reasonably well organised, but within the paragraphs poor grammar and vocab makes understanding difficult, e.g. boys has about 10 success rate in the geography.
All the best,
David

Hi! Introduction - "It is agreed ..." Is it? Who by? First main paragraph - The third sentence does not follow from the second. What do you mean by knowledge that has no use? Why is all knowledge of how landlines work irrelevant to cell phone tech? Final sentence - why? Second main paragra...

Hi Everyone, Recently, I've been looking at a number of essays and one thing needs to be pointed out to almost everyone posting their T2 essays here. DO NOT ASSUME THAT EVERY PERSON, IN EVERY COUNTRY, BOTH MALE AND FEMALE, YOUNG AND OLD, BEHAVES IN EXACTLY THE SAME WAY!!!! Example ... "Everyone...

Hello Jazira, First essay ... First main paragraph - Why 'only'? 'will not be respected' - why? Second main paragraph - any situation? any behaviour? all technical aspects? irreplaceable? As you have probably now guessed, I'm going to tell you that this (another!) essay which relies on assertions ra...

Hello Fasah, This is a very general essay that assumes every single person in the world thinks and behaves in the same way. The conclusion seems to be that people only respond to advertisements, regardless of their needs, which doesn't seem to be true. To illustrate, I haven't bought Coca-Cola for o...

Hi Max! Introduction - Increase in accidents? In many developed countries, accident rates are falling. Eliminate the problems? Do you mean that there will be no accidents on the roads and no air pollution if get rid of cars? First main paragraph - Most of the people? Where? The rest of the paragraph...

Hi! Introduction - This is a bit of a mess, I'm afraid, due to the overuse and misuse of higher level vocab (number of obesity is on trend, apparent, measurements to dispute). First main paragraph - Explain. In Britain, increased education about diet has gone hand-in-hand with obesity. Second main p...

Hi Sanket,

Introduction - The observation does not have to be justified as it is an established fact.
Main paragraphs - I think that these need some more development. The basic points are good but development would clarify them.

All the best,
David

Hi Jazira, Introduction - good First main paragraph - you are assuming that the uni students only have one reason for studying Second main paragraph - define 'successful job' and 'growing career'. Sort of guarantee? Third main paragraph - your first sentence means that the students mentioned in para...

Hi Doni, I'm mainly concerned about the clarity of this essay. 1. Your point about sports people not getting sick or ill is not clear. I mean, they do. In addition, those people might actually use medical facilities more because of sports injuries. 2. You might prevent people from getting diseases, ...

Hi Doni,
Overall, not bad, but watch out for grammatical errors (e.g. for males who ARE dissatisfied), vocab (blissfully?) and word choice (rate = the speed of change, not the number at a particular time).
All the best,
David

Hi!
The examiner has a piece of paper on which he/she writes the times for each part of the test.
Some examiners also write the numbers for the topics they ask about, but many/most examiners do this before the candidate enters the room.
All the best,
David

Hello, introduction - Crimes rates vary considerably from country to country. You may need to be more specific. Otherwise, a reasonable intro. First main paragraph - A little confusing. If a man goes to prison, this is also going to take away income from his family. Quite a lot of grammar mistakes. ...

Hi Doni, Introduction - Good First main paragraph - Not exactly on topic. Relate your points to newspapers and the stories in them. Also, not everyone has the internet! Second main paragraph - The second sentence is too long. Overall, though, ok. Conclusion - good Overall, be careful of using long s...

Hi Owais,

Introduction - Good apart from the last sentence.
First main paragraph - 'to crown my argument' is weird, but otherwise a good paragraph
Second main paragraph - Good
Conclusion - Fine

Overall, a good essay! Plenty of different structures and easily comprehensible vocab. Well done!
David

Hello Doni,
Introduction - Good. Main paragraphs - Generally good, but a little more development/evidence would be good. The 'fact' about eyesight has actually never been proven - urban myth! The conclusion could be a little more extended.
All the best,
David

Hello! Reading through the essay, it is more a list of generalisations (negative attitude is natural, changes make us more flexible) without support than an academic essay. Usually, it's a good idea to pick out a few key points and develop them rather than simply listing things that may or may not b...

Hi Doni, I don't think that you have really answered the question. The first statement is about why women take care of kids more often than men, to which your response is tradition/obligation, without suggesting why this falls on women rather than men. The second main paragraph doesn't really make s...

Hi Wayfarer,
This is a good essay, though the question is quite easy, certainly for academic IELTS. Anyway, good grammar, good vocab, good points.
Nice!
David

Hi Jenny, Often, reading and discussion are helpful. Reading is also useful for the reading test (wow!) and for the speaking test. It gives you the opportunity to pick up examples and arguments. Discussion with other students helps you to formulate arguments and get ideas from other people. To be ho...

Hello again, Owais! Introduction - 'gravitated' is a little strange, but otherwise a nice intro. First main paragraph - 'decisive position'? I think this paragraph lacks detail. Second main paragraph - As above, I don't think the ideas are clearly explained. Conclusion - You haven't explained how th...

Hi Sanket!

What an unusual question! But I like it!

Introduction - Fine.
First main paragraph - Good points.
Second main paragraph - I found this a little confusing. If some change is suggested?
Conclusion - Fine.

Overall, I would just check the second main paragraph.

All the best,
David

Hello Jenny, Introduction - The first two sentences are basically repetition. First main paragraph - Good. I like the way you have looked at various functions of mobiles. Second main paragraph - A common argument, but one which is easily demolished (sorry!). If people are using mobiles more, how doe...

Hello Jenny, Introduction - Good. First main paragraph - Why is it undeniable? Try to be a little more specific with your examples. Second main paragraph - Ah! So the first sentence of this paragraph directly contradicts the first of the previous paragraph! Again, more specific examples are needed. ...