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Yes, it's a good idea to use idioms IF you use them correctly and not too often. Idioms are often informal and not suitable for IELTS writing. Be VERY careful about using them just to try to get a higher score. This often backfires!
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Not quite sure what you mean.

Hi Fasah,
We need the diagram for this one.
David

Hi Vishwa!
I like this essay! Yes, it really does depend a LOT on where you live. Also, in Western countries, libraries have become social centres where people can organise group activities.
Well done!
David

Hello Asadurk! Introduction - demerits are deductions from a score for doing something wrong First main paragraph - So, the person who does the same job for 40 years, whilst others around him/her get promoted is loyal and a paragon? Really?! So, that's what you will be doing with your life? You're h...

Hi Medina, Introduction - perception is an idea or feeling, not an action First main paragraph - You mention independence and family life together. A little confusing. Also, you need to explain exactly how these things happen, perhaps using examples. Second main paragraph - Again, you make a lot of ...

Hi Wayfarer!
Good essay! I think that you could have mentioned the time factor more explicitly, e.g how much time might a child be able to work.
In the conclusion, you say 'combine both'. Not sure what you mean there.
All the best,
David

Hi Scott!
Very good. You have covered all the main points and noted the main trends. Overall, good vocab and grammar too.
1. dramatic, not dramatical
2. more than tripled, not more than trippled increase
All the best,
David

Hi Doni, Generally, a good essay with very good grammar and good vocab. Well done! The only two points I would make are ... 1. Your arguments in the second main paragraph aren't proven. Examples might be better. And change the language so it is not so absolute. 2. In the introduction you say you wil...

Hello!
I think that this is a good essay, but you could also mention the downsides of each viewpoint.
David

VERY good!
D

Hello! Generally, I want to like this essay, but it is even more one-sided than the essay I just marked about international aid. You clearly think that ALL media behaves in the same way. Is that really true? I agree that you have characterised most of the mainstream media correctly, but, for example...

Hello! Overall, a good essay with nice grammar and vocabulary. To improve the essay, I would point out that it's not quite as clear as you suggest. For instance, countries that are relatively good on human rights still spend money on weapons. The USA spends more than any other country and Burma does...

Hello!
Overall, not bad, but beware of some strange phrasing.
1. highest trend
2. came parallel to - returned to the same level
3. second highest calls - second highest call time
4. came to a standstill - leveled off?
5. gradually increased? - that's a massive increase in 4 years!
All the best,
David

Hi Max, Sorry, but this assessment is not going to be good. I can barely understand the first main paragraph. I think that you have tried to use a lot of high level words without actually knowing what they mean. What is the connection between competitiveness and accountability? Actually, I would thi...

Hello again, Vishwa! The first main paragraph is good. An example would make it better. My personal favourite example is the Northern White Rhinoceros. It's strange and sad to know that I have actually seen all six of the last of these rhinos that existed in the world. The second paragraph starts we...

Hi Hani! Not bad for only a year of study! Cambridge University investments? Overall, the essay is not bad, but I think that you have failed to address the question of what a good member of society is and how schools/parents create them. A good way to do this is by giving examples. Grammar is actual...

Hello! Sorry to keep you waiting. Let's have a look! Looking at the two main paragraphs, we see a common problem. In the essay, it is a good idea to present opposing points of view. However, here this has not clearly been done. For example, you say that crimes 'will never decrease' in the first para...

Hello!
This is a very good report!
A few minor suggestions ...
1. I would have a paragraph for each line.
2. 'rate' means the speed of change. In the summary, change it to 'proportion'
3. THE private/public sector
Well done!
David

Hello!
This is a good report - well done!
I think that you could sometimes change gradual/gradually to steady and use forecast/predict instead of 'will'. I would also mention in the overview that Mandarin is predicted to grow the fastest.
All the best,
David

Hi Fasah, Introduction - good First main paragraph - I like the beginning but the final two sentences are a little confusing/unclear. You are also assuming that poorer countries will not prevent these programs and that the money will automatically go to these good causes. Second main paragraph - Yes...

Hi!
I like this unusual essay! I think you focused too much on the popularity of the event and not enough on the fact that a female jockey won and the implications for horse racing and possibly other sports.
Good effort!
David

Hi Owais, Not bad but ... "practical life is full of competitions" and "Everything in life is not a competition". What you need to do to take this essay into high scoring territory is explain how these disparate concepts/ideas/arguments fit together. Also, be careful because you ...

Hi Shawan,
I think that your main ideas are generally good, but presented in a very simplistic way (e.g. notice the overuse of 'will'). I think that a few examples would enhance the essay.
All the best,
David

Hi Owais,
This is a REALLY good letter!
Well done,
David